Nexara (ENG)

Ive just started reading the first chapters, and it looks quite promising, i just hope it isn't dropped, keep up the good work author sama

this is so good and very interesting. i want to read more.

Honestly, when I skimmed through the first six chapters, I felt like you’ve got some really nice touches, especially in the fight scenes. The way you described the dragon battle was exciting—it made me feel the tension and movement, especially when Rahit was facing the dragon head-on, and that moment when he noticed the mark on its face and the sadness in its eyes. It gave the whole scene a strange, deeper feeling.  But honestly, I felt the dialogue could be a bit smoother. Like when Ash said, "Go on without me," it felt a bit cliché. You might want to add lines that feel more natural or reflect his personality better. And there were a few moments where the sequence of events felt slightly off, but that’s totally normal in early drafts.  As for the world-building, I think it needs a bit more detail. What's the deal with the Kings’ Powers? Why are the dragons attacking? I got the sense that there's a big mystery behind everything, but there aren’t many clues yet. If you start adding subtle hints about the world's history or why the dragons are appearing, it’ll keep readers more hooked.  Overall, the story definitely has strong potential, especially with your action scenes and the small details you include. Rahit feels relatable, especially when he hesitated to kill the dragon. And that moment when the arrow pierced the dragon? Honestly, it was an unexpected, brilliant twist. I felt like you planted a seed for a mystery that’ll unfold later.  So, I think you're on a good path—you just need to smooth out the dialogue a bit and add more world-building details. And trust me, you've got something special here. 💯

"Pain~pain~go away~"  The boy chanted as he caressed her back and the girl stopped crying…

<p>"It's the empress private place and will soon be yours , your highness!" the courtmaid beamed while sweet talking Seo-yun.</p>

"What's wrong?" she asked

သိုင္းကြက္ႏွစ္ကြက္ ထုတ္သံုးလိုက္ရံုႏွင့္ အဆင့္ ၄ သိုင္းဆရာႏွစ္ေယာက္ ရွံဳးနိမ့္သြားခဲ့ေလၿပီ။ ခ်န္ေျပာင္းႏွင့္ က်န္ေနေသာ ေနာက္ဆရာတေယာက္တို႔သည္ သူတို႔အၿမဲအထင္ေသးခဲ့ေသာ က်န္းရႊမ္သည္ သူတို႔ထင္ထားသေလာက္ မရိုးရွင္းမွန္း နားလည္လိုက္ၾကသည္။

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