The Vampire's Desire

Ah, lust, that age-old sin that men (and women) can't seem to stop. Now, if you're an avid follower of me, you'll know that I would never recommend this to anyone due to the evil nature inside these pages. Ya know: devils, sacrifices, and rituals. Notwithstanding, Zexusgo seems to wish to refine their writing craft. Let's see if we can give him pointers.So the story takes place in this fantasy world that centers on betrayal, transformation, and some survival. Zexusgo employs LITRPG mechanics, so it's clear where this story is headed.Ishar (the MC) is basically sacrificed to a devil (Satanic) by his comrades, which is where his journey begins. Zexusgo does a great job pacing things; we'll give him that. I think it's due to the LITRPG aspect because his action scenes are interesting enough to understand.Do we like Ishar? Heck no. Haha. He's a little complex that struggles too much after transforming. That's good, though, because it allows readers to understand him more. I favour Kael more. That or Rudrik. So you better not slack off on them, Zexusgo.Here are the things to improve on: explaining the LITRPG system so readers aren't lost on Ishar's ability sets, a better background to understand why Ishar was betrayed, and better dialogue (since they seem forced).This is Akito, hoping those who are lost may come to Jesus Christ as their Lord and Saviour.

I really love your work ..I have been so bumped lately, and your work really helped me relax I can't wait for the next chapter

Hello, nice to meet you, I am the author. I apologize in advance if you find any spelling mistakes. I am not very familiar with English so there may be some errorsdue to the language barrier.Once this is clear, I would appreciate it if you could share it and give it support... thank you very much and sorry for the inconvenience.

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"What are you going to do with that?" I asked.

"I'll tell you on the way, now hurry it up, I'm not going to wait forever!"

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Orion looked around the room before returning his gaze back to her, "I was sent some time ago by my father to investigate the numerous murders in this area and now, after my reports, my father's interests seem to be more about what goes on inside your apartment verse outside its walls." He crossed his arm over his chest before adding, "You and your friends resent involvement with the heads of the vampire clan has spiked more than just father's interests, however.  So upon your call, I was contacted and instructed to confirm everything father had already suspected and report back to the council on it." He crossed his massive arms over his chest.