Immortal Soldier King in City

It's a good book. There are quite a few grammar mistakes like the fact that 'it' is replaced be 'her' a lot and it made it a bit confusing at first but once I got used to it, it wasn't that bad. In the first few chapters there is also a serious lack of dialogue for the characters but once the author realized, the problem was fixed in the later chapters.Now the story itself. I had been looking for a couple system novel for quite a while and I couldn't find one so I was really excited when I found this one. The chapters when they first got the systems were really good, I won't go into details cuz of spoilers, but it was a bit extra but not too much so I enjoyed it. I expected a lot more romance than I got but I guess the romance will start when they get back to Earth which I'm fine with. I just feel like their affection rate increased without them actually getting closer. I'm really hoping that the romance picks up once they get back home.Also I want more dialogue between Idan and Arabel, I want to see them talking more and getting closer instead of it happening in the background and you just say something like 'after going for a walk and talking, the couple had grown closer'. I want to see what they said to each other, that would make the romance between them a bit more real to us instead of just increasing the percentage in the systems.

Good story but the reason why I gave it a lower score is because the author missed so much good potential. You start to get into the background of this abandoned child to the dragon queen and understand all the mistreatment he underwent because of his mother hating him for being half dragon, and when it comes to this climatic build up to see how the mc will deal with it…… he’s just like oh yeah I forgive you super anticlimactic really could of drawn that out and got really good character growth and development rather than just yeah you abandoned me it’s ok give me power blah blah blah man this could of been a great story that pulled you in mushed shot bro😔

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