Echoes of the Seed

Dear Author, I'm a big admirer of your writing! After reading your book, I was blown away by your talent. I have some ideas on how to take your book to the next level and expand its readership. Would you be willing to listen to my feedback and suggestions?

Overall, this story is enjoyable to read. I would honestly tell you to give it a try. The mystery keeps the reader engaged, and I like the idea of superpowers. *However, I most definitely have complaints. 1. It’s really frustrating with how much the MC feels like he has to save everyone every single second. 2. The only two girls the MC actually has sex with completely disappear and become irrelevant afterwards. Youd think their would be feelings at all. 3. And my biggest frustration, the MC being captured and tortured for 20+ days when everyone else is getting stronger and having to rescue his sorry butt is not enjoyable to read. What makes it worse is the fact that he’s in that predicament because he sacrificed himself for someone portrayed to be bad. As much as I enjoyed the overall story, I don’t know if I’ll continue reading if the MC won’t wake up the next few chapters. Especially if he’s weak as hell.

Story is well written, and has quite a bit of future potential. Just remember this though, if you yourself, enjoy writing your stories, then that is the one thing that should matter the most more then anything else. Sometimes, it is not about any sort of money or payment, but should in fact, always be about enjoying sharing your work with your viewers and fans. And that, should always take priority, because if your fans and viewers enjoy reading your work, as well as potential future generations, then that is the one thing, that should matter more to you then anything else. For you see, people are more concerned in living in the here and now. While people me, we like to have a more, long game in mind. Now, don't take this as some sort of negative by any means, I am just saying, that if we want future generations to enjoy this world, then we have to be willing to protect what we love, in an effort to do our best to better our future.

"In the present conditions, I have to answer back to you, hi Ifritz. Like that?"

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