What's up guys, this is my first attempt in writing a web novel. I'm open to any feedback so that I can improve my story as it progresses.hope you guys enjoy Ryo's journey.

i really love this novel pls update new epi

Its a good read. The story is although typical to most harem system novels, the execution is good.

Theres a lot of problems with this one. The grammar is okay but sometimes goes over the line like adding more verbs like moved, stepped, swooshed, sped, and all that. The formatting is worse too, like its all over the place. Its like someone wrote it with passion but forgot how to make everything make sense. this one has potential yes, but theres a lot of problems. like, the explanations are pretty half assed and lacks cohesion. making a writer be able to control plot? whats with that? just say thats the mcs golden finger and everything will go his way. you even added that the changes in reality is limited, but what kind of limit? can he use it for a thousand times if its just a small change? like, change memories to make the characters fallfor mc? lots of problema the comedy was good thiugh, the banter between the writer dude and mc.Just edit it. fix the grammar. make a proper reflection on what is happening and make it clearer. the thing about the writer about making any changes to the reality, nerf it, like, make him only be able to use it once a week and only in one person. also, why is the baby able to practice his mucles? it doesnt form yet for day old babies. even with it just being seven chapters the faults are visible.overall a mess, mix of passion, impatience, lack of edits, lack of refining on the details, lack of cohesion, the comedy sometimes lands, sometimes the comedy feels forced. Tone down the other comedy you intent since it mostly doesnt work, keep the playful banter between the main character and the writer though, I liked that one. final verdict: 2 stars.good luck and keep writing!

Dear Author,I like how you made the story from an apocalyptic settings, I also did write a book named World Apocalypse but sad to say it didn't get enough credit to have an exclusive contract.Anyways, about your book, it's nice. Keep it up!

As the author, its reasonable to give five stars

nice work fresh beamer more work brother

SFGTMH is a well-written story with a lot of potential. TLDR: I enjoyed it.13 chapters in, there are a lot of typical guys, but the main character manages to stay refreshing with his dedication to fatherhood and a bit of hyperbole to how he reacts to situations.Setting-wise, I think the world could do with a bit more fleshing out, perhaps during the MCs' next downtime.It's a bit early to comment on character development, but I hope that the daughter especially is shown to change over time as she grows, given her age and the stressors of the situation.

Honestly a great read. The only downside is the harem part, which feels kinda forced and unnecessary.

wonderful story. author is amazing! I'm so obsessed with this book

Once again we have the atypical "I wanna be a devil" story. No offense, author. So let's set aside the evil, horn-killing theme of this novel and tackle what the writer tried to portray.Here's a VRMMORPG that takes the concept of a video game to a different level—no pun intended. Kenji's kinda weird at first until he embraces being a necromancer. Quite certain the author's played more than enough fantasy/adventure games; otherwise, he wouldn't have been able to write an interesting world.Now onto pacing. Where most struggle with this, he didn't do a bad job. So, Kenji goes from some type of bad a** to a necromancer. You'd think he'd just jump in and start wreaking havoc, but no, there's actually exploration to his past.What about other characters? Well, as if Merlin wasn't your generic kind of name that hints to you-know-what, they're actually not written badly. I'd say this novel's a troubling competition once the narrative reaches its peak.Can I recommend it to my Christian audience? Absolutely not. Can I say the author is a bona fide writer who knows how to format a book in the style of introducing leveling and stats? Oh yeah.

This novel is truly exceptional, blending top-tier storytelling with masterfully written smut. It’s easily the best thing I’ve ever read, keeping me captivated from start to finish.