Shadow of the careless king

Very intriguing book, excited for the new chapters.  The plot is interesting and characters well described. Well done, author.

"Didn't you saw the board ". suddenly a husky voice said.

Ithron stretched out his right arm and touched the crystal with his fingers. It was warm.

Unlike the house-elves in Slytherin's common room, Reed has no prejudice of me being a muggle. It's probably because, he served below the castle for his entire life while those house-elves had served a long line of pureblood students.

Bhumi was surprised and asked him, "Who cut these fruits? Did you cut them?"

  "Yes. I'm sorry, Taitsuke." She ruffles my hair. Her apology makes me feel even worse. 'If she apologizes, who am I supposed to direct my angst to?' Her hands are covered in an unfamiliar white Chi. My eyelids start to be heavy. 'I feel.. tired."

                           He returned back to the clan and pretended nothing happened. Shin Feng lingered in his mind but he was useless. He clenched his fist in anger. He never let anyone see it though

The author here with a totally biased reviewI've wanted to start consistently writing a story for a while now, so I'm trying to use this as a way to motivate me to not only write more but also improve on things such as grammar and style.I'll be trying to get this story posted at least once a week and with a goal of 1000 words for a page from now on.So thanks to those who stick around to see me fling myself at writing and hope I hit a bullseye.