The Long Lost Mafia Prince

So far, this novel has a wide use of vocabulary, which makes for engaging reading. The writing itself is enjoyable, with well-crafted sentences that showcase the author’s skill. However, by Chapter 8, the story feels rushed. Events move quickly without much time for buildup, making it hard to fully connect with the world or characters.Speaking of the world, there isn’t much in the way of world-building. The setting feels vague, with little detail to anchor the reader in a specific time or place. This makes it difficult to become fully immersed. Additionally, the plot lacks a clear sense of direction. While some novels take time to unfold, this one doesn’t seem to be building toward anything specific—at least not yet.Overall, while the writing itself is strong, the pacing and lack of depth in both world-building and plot progression make it difficult to fully engage with the story. I’ll see if things improve later on, but so far, it feels somewhat underdeveloped.Another big issue I have is the lack one quotation marks. There is no use of them at all which can make it annoying to understand who is talking, for example “ ” - for when a character is talking out loud ‘ ‘ - for when mc is reading someone’s thoughts But anyway good effort from the author, can tell they care about writing.

A great start! Plenty of action, that's what you love about isekais! Can't wait to find out more in the next chapters! Draven has a certain charisma and a special sense of humour! :D I can only recommend it again!

First time im writing a review about a novel so i will be honest. The ideia behind the novel is good, but the author makes no sense of it, no world building, no explanations of how things came to be, no nothing. He forgets abouts the things says in chapters like,1 example: MC(rank F) acts like a allmighty being against a B rank and challenges him to a fight in due a week?(1 month? dont really remember) then 3 to 4 chapters says that he has to "play low" (in a área wihlth ONLY F and E ranks) so that he doenst get in trouble like "stupids mcs" from others novels. Like wtf, did you forget about what you wrote in before!?!?!?!?....And guess what he did yes, because its been weeks and zero mention about the fight.2 example: When MC entered the new zone with the new base there was a mention of an horde that would "challenge" the lords of the new zone in 10 days and once again the author totally forgot about that. There are so many more like this ones that its just sad. Im not telling you to give up on writing, but try to remake and improve before continuing to progressing the novel.Keep the consistency of his power.. If he can summon 20 skeletons in the new area everyday then in the chapter 95 he should have something like 200 skeletons( half at  least F+) , or something like 20 E+/D and in the latest chapts author says he can already summon 60 skeletons a day(its been a while already so dont really remember) so MC should have an army of skeletons and you cant use the excuse of "sacrificing" them for power forever. You say one thing in chapter and another in the next. Once again, Im not telling you to give up, but a lot of improvement is needed. Im not an expert and not a writer, just a reader who gave his opinion.If you think Im wrong dont hesitate to let me know.Cumps,

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She badly wants to go home but ended up sighing because the Crown Prince is currently holding her bloody hand while lying on the stretcher.

"Yes, darling, we are almost there..."

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She pecks his forehead and cheek in a light manner.  "There, happy?"