Legend of Aurum

Flow of the story is a bit jittery, with lack of commas and spacings in some spots. Paragraphing can have a little more work done, because reading a block of texts is never fun.

Characters are great, despite the jittery quality of writing you can tell the characters have at least more depth than the skin.

World background? Gradual introduction...?

Eh, but at least it's somewhat believable, despite the fact that having languages from different worlds be so similar is slightly too unlikely. Unless we are dealing with multiverse type of transmigration/reincarnation.

Overall, 4/5 stars. Obviously, English can be improved, but no one is perfect.

Up to chapter 5 honestly it looks like those ancient Chinese cultivation novels and like a bit of the mind that tells them everything like slime isekai and authorwiz.

Overall this was a pretty good novel.

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Hello! Everyone I am the author of this novel. It's second try to write this novel. I want to share my imagination and practice my writing and English.
The writing quality is probably low for now but it will be improved with time and effort. I hope you can help me with pinpointing the grammar, spelling and logic errors to make this story better. I am using Grammarly but it's basic version and it only shows the basic errors.  
Thank you for your attention! I hope, all of us will gain something from this story. :)

The story has its faults, but there is a noticeable growth for the author, so I expect this to change into a good story at some point. Author does sadly need an editor to help him or her out with the whole process, as there are mistakes and repetitiveness in the chapters.

The story has a promising premise. Down the road, I noticed there were too many abrupt time-skips in a single chapter. While this is inevitable, please consider a time-skip once every other chapter or so if necessary and use the chance to elaborate more about characters.

Settling that aside, as other had pointed out, there are grammatical errors, incorrect uses of punctuation marks and chopped sentences. I'd suggest getting an editor to help you with this issue and you could focus more on fleshing out your main plot.

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