Writing, I gave 4 because something looks off, you the feel is not coming try seeking inspiration from webnovels like the Supre Magus or Shadow Slave, etc. Updating Stability I gave 5, it is good 9 chapters in 4 days is nice speed, keep it up, but don't burn out. Story Development, I gave 4 because there can be more smoother transitions between scene changes and could add more detailed accounts of events. Character Design, again 4 because you have developed each side character's traits, behavior and overall design from the starting moment they landed in the story, but for the main character, you had made it so confusing. Initially he was much innocent and childish and that makes sense for a three year old but from chapter 4 he sounds like an adult and in case of Drengvar, he is more like a 3 year old but still he too, at the point when Noctis manipulates him, that point really doesn't make much sense dialogue transition got wasted. World Background also 4 Brooch system and Historic content is nice but naming of areas their culture "Byzantine" Is something standing off and we still don't know what's the purpose of having brooches? They are most likely for helping others as I see, but still it needs to be clarified which we expect later in the story at least. You have a lot of facilities given by webnovel app, you may try using the "Auxiliary Chapters And Volumes" For sharing extra information to clarify all these doubts and then to develop a fanbase. Overall, your work is fantastic and decent but still needs some improvements, that I have mentioned. Thank You.

Legit jus a big mess so many problems1. Inconsistent with names he switches the names of the ice girl so much and the sword like how can’t you remeber this. He also uses the wrong name for the eyes saying sharigan a lot 2. Power system is jus dumb he can fight and kill a peak c rank but struggles against a D rank dummy keep in mind he’s like E rank during this and he fought a main character fine as a E- rank while they were D rank so like what3. He jus gets new powers all the time. He jus gets stuff and doesn’t even have like a fighting style tbh he jus does whatever like he uses a katana and its supposed to be like quick and wtv and then he gets telekinesis and starts using daggers and besides that he also jus gets a nine tailed fox out of no where and people jus are fine with it not even questioning how he got it if he’s disowned and supposedly untalented enough to be disowned.4. Next thing is no back story all we know is he is disowned fir being untalented but he improves as if he has no bad talent and as far as i know he doesn’t drink anything besides the mana potion that boosts his talent to grow that much5. Characters jus hate him for some reason and from the looks of it it’s because he got disowned and they jus interact in a boring rigid unrealistic way like ice girl can be struggling to do telekinesis and then jus fight perfectly fine with it in the next paragraph As long as you can close your eyes and mind this novel is fine but besides that it’s jus words and shit legit nothing makes sense and there’s no real story line jus random things to keep it going

An amazing start to a highly entertaining novel that shows great potential. The story is filled with humor and witty commentary, making it an enjoyable and engaging read. I highly recommend everyone to give it a try!

it reminds me so much of "I Woke Up Piloting the Strongest Starship, so I Became a Space Mercenary" with a few tweaks here and there, probably from other novels, its really good at least until ch 28 which is what i can read for free at this point

I know I'm late, but I wanted to answer some questions.Is this Harem? Yes. Will it have smut? Nope. No outright smut. So no intimate descriptions and stuff about a 12-inch donger or 106 cm you-know-what.Is the story fast-paced? No. I want to take my time building this story BRICK BY BRICK!Does the story suck? You tell me. Does it?If you have any other questions, feel free to ask below.

Hello Hello! This is your greedy author! I hope you can enjoy this story! There are many points that can be improved and believe me, I know that! But any constructive criticism, comments and questions, I will always be here to answer your questions! Also, enjoy this work! I do them with great care and I hope you love them as much as I do! Thank you for reading!

From the moment I started reading, I was hooked! I think I'll stick around to see how it goes.

Don't worry and don't rush to pirate it as the chapters would be forever free here.

Not bad at all comrade…heh                                                                                                      

The downfall of this amazing novel was the authors insistence on destroying the MC’s backbone and making him a simp that couldn’t get the job done or return any retribution. Also destroying the MC’s first wife Lia and relegating her to be at the butt end of some garbage imperial harem. Honestly if you want yo see how to destroy a good thing go no further than this novel.

The book is great, i feel very good resonance with it, it's not your normal weak mc or too op one, this mc Is likeable and in middle. Also the story background and premise are perfect for those easy going readers. OVERALL ID SAY YOU OUTDID YOURSELF AUTHOR SAN

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