Small upgrade system

Story OK. To be fair the author did say its his first novel and he isn't a native English speaker. And it shows. Badly. I've dropped it. I rarely drop books just because of writing quality but I couldn't continue.This was as bad as mtl. The bad ones. BUT if you can handle mtl or are not a native speaker then this isn't really a problem. As this was also the authors first work, other problems such as story pacing, character progression, character interaction and behaviour all needs work. Theres a lot of telling and very little showing. This comes with practice, time and experience.My advise to the author as simply a fan of light novels is to read more well written English novels. Not translated, but actual English novels. You'll pick up a lot and it'll help you construct your novels better in tbe future.For anyone who read all this and want an actual review.. Transmigration story where male MC gets into modern world with monsters. System makes him cultivate stronger. For once the original body isn't some begger or poor son which is actually refreshing. It's why I think this author with some work and experience can actually write a good novel in the future.

Quite like it despite the constant use of incorrect words, and the odd misspelling :)

For not having English as first language its okay, but would advise the author to use spell check before uploading.

The story has a lot of potential, it is a great idea, but unfortunately has terrible execution. The fighting is explained terribly and the author makes a lot of mistakes, he forgets what he has written already, and English is clearly not his first language

First of all props for putting your story out there takes hard work to do that. now saying that , the story feels like it needs some major editing and proof reading. some of the sentences just dont make sense  so wilr i say cheers for your work and story ideas, ima bow out on reading more of this. salute

pretty good novel so far but author please re-write the chapters and use grammarly.. there are so many mistakes and the kind of mistakes that if you use even the free version of grammarly it will fix most mistakes.. or maybe even get an editor even though it costs it would be worth it as many will stop reading if the quality doesn't rise

As a fan of many authors, and with the respect I have for those who work hard to make their novels readable, I say now that this novel is very unreadable, the author hasn’t bothered to understand how to use the English language properly when writing. Errors everywhere. For those of you who keep up with this l.n. Props to you, you’re seriously a different breed. But for the author I say, read English literature, don’t stick to reading light novels all the time, because in the long run you won’t improve your English writing if you don’t have a solid grasp on the writing technique. Also read English dictionaries. And do free English lessons using an app or the internet. I can tell you’re young so you have a lot of potential. This novel is truly just your start and I hope your writing technique on your next ones will be so good they can’t even be compared to this one. Alright that’s all I wanted to say. And as a brother this novel is trash get better at writing in English bro.

small small upgrades che..
not bad..
not bad at all..

The concept behind the story itself is good. But the mc is shown practically as machine whose only job is to eat, sleep, train and dungeon run.. and close to no human interaction.
Writing quality is average to say the least as many grammatical mistakes and wrong usage to words can be seen.
well, for story development there is nothing of a story only a sort summary of his background and what is now then he just goes around training and dungeon running with no human or world interaction...
Character design. . .   well, at least the characters that author had given importance to are well described and designed but later in story i got the feeling that the story is all about mc dungeon running with no outside interaction.
update stability..  .i don't know about this...  
World background well, it is well described but as we progress only mc's home, motel and dungeon becomes readers world because nothing is told or happens with mc in relation to that.

So in short if you want to read a novel where mc just focuses on getting stronger with nothing else in mind then go ahead.   
(well, after many chapters some world opening happens with mc but still it can be considered negligible interaction with outer world)