Political Mask

Why aren't more people here?? This is amazing! Let's go into details.Writing quality would need more adjustments. It gets quite clustered and a bit confusing which is bad bcs it underwhelms the feels of the story. I recommend using grammarly, and the add-ons (author's note) should also be fluidly mixed into the story. This is the only problematic part of this novel i can pin down. Stability of updates seems good enough.Story development is interesting, We follow the protagonists from their knuckeheaded state which leads them into trouble before we enter the main interlude. My advise though is that it might get confusing and thus irritating to readers so it'll do good for the novel if the exposition is written more clearly.I keep saying clearly so lemme explain-- some parts feel clustered, despite it being a first perspective, the character's thoughts and the exposition should mingle well. It clashes a lot in the story leaving the readers quite confused. It'd great if author manages to capture the choas of the character's mind while streamlining the exposition with it. Smoothness, that's what i'm talking about. To be blunt, the writing feels a bit jarring and difficult to follow due to its slight erraticness.Despite its jaggard edges i see immeasurable potential, i like the dialogue and the way they speak. The characters feels authentic, from the two shi- idk but mc and their? friend. To infinity, i quite like her sleeping danger vibes, it was executed quite well enough to leave a lasting impression on readers (me haha).In conclusion, this feels raw. I see the potential, its impressive, the synopsis hooked me from the very first instant and I'm not kidding- who wouldn't like to see two brats messing up the world? Well i most definitely do. Believe it or not its an original concept.But it'd benefit from more editing. Like i say, it feels like the rawest version straight from the author's mind. More delibration would do it well, do consider author. Regardless, kudos to this wonderful piece of fiction. Keep going author, oh and I lied, you're cringe but you're not the only cringe one, we all are! And that's why you need to be cringe for us the cringe readers to actually enjoy... okay lemme see myself out lol.

My question is the simple is the MC like Virgin Mary character that can’t see any evil or will forgive people and things like no revenge.

Great story overall with good characters. The pacing of the story and developments of the characters are good. Felt similar to shows like Hyouka and Spiral. Definitely a good read 🙂

The plot is flawless and so character development, Some are bad and unnecessary and there is a lot of info dump but; totally the idea is great, author just lacks creativity but It worth reading. The thing that bothers me, is that the MC's rank doesn't increase, although he has the power of a limit or even an S ranked awakener but he's stuck at C rank, hope author fix it):

"Yes my Lord," answered Lilith while seeing Light sleep soundly.

~A few years later~

"Hey, my name is Hematin, Hematin Londr.

"Sir, there's another important matter. Dumbledore and some stuff from Hogwarts are keeping a close on Ms Hermione. Even now there are at least one wizard and one witch outside Granger residence. They are most probably from Order of Phoenix. I can recognise Hestia Jones but the other one, I have no information about him on my database." said Micasa.