Marked and Claimed by Three Alphas

The beginning of the novel is good. Your approach of making the introduction(chapter 0) philosophical is intriguing.As I read further, I found the build up to be good too, even though I thought some things were odd, but that didn't affect the quality and flow. The scenes are interesting and that seems to be your strongest point so far, like, you are very good at writing moments. The problem I had in the middle is how much of it was "filler". A decent bit of it was character information and skill information (system time) that didn't really move things ahead but rather slowed them down and broke my immersion.I can't say much about the character design since there's not much to go off of. Most of the beginning was action and it's in the most recent chapters that you started  showing his initial disposition. I guess we'll see...

It's a great read. The story is going good. The upload schedule is regular.

"What is it lass? What business does ye have with me? If you're looking for a roll in the sheets you're neither old nor hairy enough for my taste." Friedrich leered slightly at her, attempting to intimidate her into letting go.

She then remembered.

" 70% .... 90% .. 100% "

Author is stretching the story so much, it's unbearable... Scenarios that could be nicely described with no more than 3 sentences are made into 3 chapters instead... MC is stupidly OP and his heavenly plot armor is gifting him the rarest of treasures whenever there is enough spacing left in the chapters... Otherwise typically chinese trash cultivation novel disguised as some sort of western sword and magic novel... Faceslapping, antagonistic braindead young masters that want to kill Mc for no reason at all, psychopathic MC and all the other copy paste wuxi things... I gave the novel 135 chapters to proof at least some development in quality but alas, there was none... Waste of money to read this novel... There isn't even anything game-related or system-related (except the transmigration from a game) in this novel...

"If your not going to kill us" Sasuke interrupted "Then the most you can do is keep us lock up and let me tell you we 'will' escape and with our abilities you will never be able to find us."

Coca-Cola sales booth on the Cape Verde island ofFogoin 2004.