Doomsday : climbing the tower with SSS rank skill

Oh, the story was really interesting. I hope you keep up the good work for this story. It's already great. I can feel the emotion you're trying to convey on each and every words.

Potential! I must say, it is exciting diving into the world. While it's not without flaws, the potential of the plot and promise on display are certainly good.Writing - Needs improvement. A lot. But it's readable, understable and sufficient. Still, if the author can improve the writing by a level or two, it will be amazing. Tip- Focus on some realistic reactions from characters, situations and such. Plot- Since there isn't much of plot given till now, I have considered it's potential. If The author plays it right, the plot can become a great piece among 'system' contents.Character - Dialogues! they make or break the characters and it is good to see, character have plenty interaction. Well done there. Just needs some refinement.World Building- Although not unique in its genre with systems, ranks, monsters, etc. I could understand the world quite a lot from the first 15 chapters. So, I would say it was done great. Well, there is more to explore in future, so I belive again in it's potential.Overall, it is a good story. Needs editing and refinements, but still enjoyable.

The story so far is engaging and filled with detail. The characters are well written and most if them are very lovely, I'm especially a fan of the maid! I look forward to more chapters!

I'm sorry, I lost myself a bit there. It's just that I panic whenever I see strawberry shortcake. Heck, you could pull out any secrets from me using it.

And all that glitters is gold

Hey now, you're an all-star, get your game on, go play

Tapi Mt. Jiuhua bukan sekadar tempat bagi penyair. Itu juga merupakan kepala di antara tempat-tempat di mana umat Budha mengadakan upacara sakral untuk menghormati Ksitigarbha Bodhisatvva.

Booted feet thundered into the room, one pair much heavier than the rest.  Lucas and the vamps found themselves surrounded by security men in silver-spiked body armor.  They brandished Taser wands in an attempt to quell the disruption.  Several more guards were armed with super-soakers.  Lucas sniffed the air.  Loaded for vamp, holy water and garlic.