Fine

Okay, to the point, first, your writing still needs improvement, many are too short, and moreover, emotional blur, but I noticed an interesting flow, just don't get good execution, for the next you can learn how to write better, such as making the narrative feel alive, etc.

I was recommended this by a good friend of mine so far one chapter in I can’t wait to see how this story will story progress , Xerxes is such  a great character and I can’t wait to see the mystery of the fallen kingdom unfold.❤️❤️❤️

Mostly a long shopping list again and again. Needs to flesh out about the people, family, etc. Tired of what antique sells for what and how many tons of rice etc. Good idea for book but falls short of what it could be.

Love it so far! Writing quality is good. Character design is simple but effective.

And immediately Pak Rioy asked Mr. Sange "So Mr. Sangefull, what are the details of your problem."

That's the way I like it and I never get bored

At this point, the random viewers of the show were on Lan Xiaolins' side, because of the lack of evidence Ling Yue provided. The evidence of the birth certificate Xiaolin had because she just came from the hospital, was enough from them.

Gamers Mind - Max