The Villain's Second Timeline

Ok, loved this angle on revenge! However, the two leads come across as very naive and the meeting with her father was sad. Her husband/partner is already withholding info for dramatic effect rather than giving her a heads-up so she knows what she’s walking into. Also, why doesn’t she already know who his second family is?! She’s willing to get married for this revenge but not to do any research? I think I was expecting intelligent plans laid out that would unfold as we go but it feels more like a messy tantrum. I’m out now but I hope it gets better for you all! Great concept, Author!

"Is he not the man wh-"

"Luke hop in, I will give you and Mark a ride to my house, you can leave your stuff and get changed there" Kylee yells as I see his dad pulling up infront of me with Kyle already waving to me from the back seat and Mark digging through his backpack looking for something.

while checking the area in his balcony he saw a weirs looking arcade across his street, it was full of neon lights and had a big sign, "New Game" the sign was lit up and quite an eye catcher so Dylan decided to go there and with great awe and astonishment he was captivated by the environment that coated him.

Name: Gordon

With a huff and a quick straightening of his jacket, he looked around for the vampire.

"Yeah. I agree…. It doesn't feel right."

She explained further that although her eyes were open like a normal person, no stimuli could trigger her reaction.