I give one because he lied... I came for the fluffiness described in summary. Im sick of the revenge cycle of xianxia. Dont read if I dont like and dont post anything if I dont like? Its my right and my will so before anyone rant about why I should pay respect, I don't sell my respect cheap and not freely given. Summary even lied.. Why should I show respect.
The MC was ok in the beginning with an ok background and a cool OP ability and all that. The MC finds a cave with a lot of cool stuff in it that I found interesting then he decides to go into town and read up on the history of the world he was in. He then decides to go to an auction which is okay I guess,like he probably has better stuff anyway but ok. Then he buys some demon girl for "information" and I thought it would be cool if he becomes his servant or bodyguard or something like that but no,she becomes his love interest or something which doesn't make any sense considering of his history and the girls! I guess the author wanted to make him softer so he did thisor author wanted romance in the first place and didn't do it well. All in all the plot was interesting and I liked the MC in the beginning but after the romance started it messed with plot and just made MC and the girl really annoying,in short romance was forced and it wasn't enjoyable after that.
Overall the story is a cute idea following this highschooler through the akwardness and tribulations of being a teenager. There are several places in the story where things could be fleshed out better however, especially the characters. The only relationship we see fleshed out here is between Dashuan and Ray, and even there we still get too much uneccesary fluff that tells us very little about the characters. Jesicca also starts as a manic pixie dream girl, and isn't given much character development. We still see her as this unrealistic idea of what a teenage girl is like.And don't be afraid to give your characters each authentic voices! I often found you using the same slang with each character, including Jessica (even though she's foreign). Lots of potential here! Please proofread your work and make your characters shine! We don't need to know all the specifics of bball!
So I'll giving you some review....I saw your post in the forum.I didn't actually read your novel, Because firstly I'm not a fan of a novel like this but I really thought that you are a good writer...Good luck to your novel😃😃😃
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