A little shameless author review to get things started! I hope you enjoy what I'm writing, and I truly appreciate any feedback you have to offer. Looking forward to hearing your thoughts!

Okay, frankly you have a great, unique idea going on. But honestly, this feels like a cross between an academic paper and a contract to get myself a virtual avatar built not a novel. 🙃First of all, I suggest you do away with the repeated use of the phrase "the said this and that" its disturbing, and it gives a very mechanical and legal outlook to your text. Like it's a user term from some software that you'll just scroll to the end and hit I accept without reading a single word. Secondly, the second chapter feels like some friend of mine saw an amazing movie and is briefing me about it. Not that I'm reading it for myself. You are telling me word to what what is happening, who is feeling what etc. Things that should be shown, should be subtly conveyed through dialogue and other creative means are flatly thrown at my face. Paragraphs are too long and too full of text. This chapter screams for more dialogue and conversation. Make your sentences short, snappy and try to keep too much scientifically jargon out. Or provide a glossary at the end of the chapter. All in all, I truly appreciate the uniqueness of your idea, but to be a novel, it has a long way to go. Good luck.

Hello, as the author of this novel, I will give this one a five-star! You can ask anything regarding this novel in the comment below. Also, below are things that would happen in the novel: 1. MC would get a system when he is 18, before that he will be weak, but become overpowered once he has it.2. You can see the villain tag in it, but MC won't act villainous at the start of the novel, but he would do so after getting the system and wanting to take revenge. 3. So yes, no harem until the later chapter, but don't worry, the pace would be fast before MC got the system. 4. This novel will have more than 3 women in it. 5. Inc$st+Netori, but no Netorare and yuri.

Walaupun lanjutan dari fans.. ceritanya masih tetap menarik... Buat penasaran bagaimana akhir dari ceritanya.. apakah semua akan menjadi musuh atau ada beberapa yang akan tetap menjadi keluarga

there are many things and interesting story after chapter 100 so keep watching Even though

The story line is quite funny,I'm definitely going to love reading this

J ai eu beaucoup de plaisir en lisant votre roman je le conseille vivement , hâte de lire les prochains chapitres tout en vous souhaitant beaucoup de courage

fabulous, fantastic, outstanding, supercalifragilisticexpialidocious, bamboozling, lovable, excellent

i like revenge and reborn kind of book and ur book looks interesting . waiting for more updates keep it up

Really well written story , keep uploading author xd enjoying reading it so far.

Hi, shameless author here.Please drop your reviews and comment on your favorite chapters.Thank you for reading my book.

I'm slowly beginning to love this book.Chapter 2 got me hooked...