Lightning Leo

I really don’t know why am I reading this, I really thought that the author would become more discriptive of ..... well everything .Right now what I am seeing and reading here is nothing but words on paper, no real feelings behind the words being said or the actions that are happening . I don’t really know if it’ll get better or anything, after all I only read till chapter 8 , but right now all I am seeing is emotionless dialog said by blank faces who we don’t even know who they look like , and chapters that seem to not really have a goal to them just a bunch of jumbled up words together . Nevertheless I’ll keep on reading for the reason that brought all of you guys here, we ain’t got nothing else to read 🤣🤣

This is one of my favorite novels. The MC is not only OP, he’s OP in a way we rarely see where every fight seems like a struggle to some degree. Not only, that, he’s hilarious in every way. The only issue I’ve ever had with this book is the worldbuilding, and that’s not even because of the author’s fault. Are some of the gaps in knowledge because he didn’t tell us? Yes. Do they exist because he didn’t feel like filling them in? Also probably yes. However, there isn’t a single gap in knowledge that he didn’t acknowledge and set up for the future. Unfortunately, it appears like this gem has been dropped, but while it lasted it was one of the best novels I know of. This novel was one of the first that I read, and it has remained at or near the top of my list since I first found it. All of this author’s novels are great as well, but this one in particular is amazing.

good book, great story, i hope this story will continue 😶..... plz don't be dropped book 😢 ...............................................................raw anyone?

Good day. Well, it's past midnight here, so I won't make my review formal as I am extremely sleepy to type. Writing Quality is absolutely great except for the slight punctuation mistakes here and there. One involved a comma, I didn't point out all of them since I didn't want to be nitpicky. When it comes to vocabulary, I like your choice of words. They aren't repetitive, but I would like to suggest that you keep the dialogue tags simple, and not use a thousand alternatives for "said" and "ask." Like what Stephen King said, " I think we all agree that dialogue tags are necessary for readers to know who’s talking. But writers are divided in how we use them:Some, including Raymond Carver, simply use “he said, she said”; others apparently invent a million different synonyms for “said”; still others try to find balance between the two extremes, sometimes even fifty-fifty.Yesterday, yet another writer, Jack Woe, jumped into the fray:I’ve read quite a few blogs about the evilness of dialogue tags. For example, Joe Moore wrote in The Kill Zone how new authors are overusing the alternatives of said.They go to: exclaimed, murmured, screamed, whispered, pleaded, shrieked, demanded, ordered, cried, shouted, and my all-time favorite, muttered.Thing is, I as a reader, don’t care. I just don’t read dialogue tags — at all.He’s not alone. To me, modifying such a perfectly fine tag as “said” is like Pimp My Ride gone bad. (Tip: Read that sentence again in Samuel L. Jackson’s voice.) I suggest you head over to Jack’s blog to read his brief, yet succinct musing over dialogue tags—or as Stephen King puts it in “On Writing”, “dialogue attribution.”A passionate adversary to adverbs, King warns against using adverbs in dialogue attribution, which reduce the effectiveness of the attribution verb:I insist that you use the adverb in dialogue attribution only in the rarest and most special of occasions … and not even then, if you can avoid it. Just to make sure we all know what we’re talking about, examine these three sentences:“Put it down!” she shouted.“Give it back,” he pleaded, “it’s mine.”“Don’t be such a fool, Jekyll,” Utterson said.In these sentences, shouted, pleaded, and said are verbs of dialogue attribution. Now look at these dubious revisions:“Put it down!” she shouted menacingly.“Give it back,” he pleaded abjectly, “it’s mine.”“Don’t be such a fool, Jekyll,” Utterson said contemptuously.The three latter sentences are all weaker than the three former ones, and most readers will see why immediately.[…]Some writers try to evade the no-adverb rule by shooting the attribution verb full of steroids. The result is familiar to any reader of pulp fiction or paperback originals:”“Put the gun down, Utterson!” Jekyll grated.“Never stop kissing me!” Shayna gasped.“You damned tease!” Bill jerked out.The best form of dialogue attribution is said, as in he said, she said, Bill said, Monica said.Keep things simple, but! That doesn't mean you'll only stick with said and asked. Just use them more often. Next, I love the way you convey emotions for your characters. They're very well done. Another suggestion is that you get to the point. An example of this is the first three to four chapters I think in which you spent all those four chapters to reveal she died. Also, during these chapters, I only noticed two things that revolved around it. Her unusual liking to kidnaps and something to do with asking herself if she really is dead. Perhaps you could cut off some unnecessary scenes there. Next, character design. Well done! I was able to imagine the looks of the characters in a few paragraphs or so, I don't believe you're a newbie writer. When I started out writing during my high-school times, I could barely think of any synonyms. There wasn't Google back then, so I had to rely on Thesauruses and Dictionaries in which it could only be found within libraries. Sigh, the nearest library from me that time was so far. It's also quite funny that this the countless time in a row of reading a novel that has something to do with death and being alive again. I guess that's the majority of books here. If there are any suggestions I could give, that would be getting used to using em dashes.You're first person POV is also quite great. It's not the boring, "I went here then go here and so on and so forth" type of first person. Well, that's all I can criticize for now. I know this review isn't formal, I'm missing the front matter and the summary, but then again, I've got to return to my sleep.That is all I can say for now. -Dann Giovanni

Let me be 100% honest about this review. The first 55 chapters of this book are written in a tone of misery and hardwork. This rest of the book is written to show the ridiculous hardwork the protagonist puts in. In one word the book is about misery of people without talent. I do not know what the author was trying to tell the reader by writing this book. The book is mostly about hardships of the protagonist. I personally am not a fan of book in which the protagonist puts in a lots of hardwork and gets close to nothing results.

When I read this novel I could see that the novel is has been created with a great deal of effort. The characters are explained very well and you can visuals exactly what is needed to understand what is going on.You are able to understand the characters reason for doing certain things this makes the reader able to understand what the character is going through. The system is very well implemented and helps lead the main character along without distracting from the story. I would highly recommend this novel for anyone that enjoys a well written novel with a great story.

I'm disappointed in the author. He did well up until around 200 chapters, this Linzhi character was totally unnecessary. The author said he went to a different world so why are people from his past world there, it's tiring to read.

and suddenly Shang'a!