I looked at my dormmate and...He actually seems like a bully to me. I'm guessing he's an emo to be honest. I just shrugged it off and looked away. I then heard a knock when I immediately stood up to open the door.
death experience with Seath and his adventures in the Labyrinth. It was the lone maroon eye with a rippled pattern with 9 tomoe spinning ominously as it stared back at Bell.
"This unit curated and archived every single literature, knowledge, and technology of the race known as broken lords possess, with a sense of achievement it replied."
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this is my thought on this novel after reading up to 48 chaptersi will be dead honest, this is a novel that i must say.. a hidden gem with extremely big potential to grow with good marketings. It has nice story, good and normal pace plot development, and good character development. I prefer you to put the power level in this world as we still don't know how does one determine their strength. I wish you will have these in the future but anyway its a good novel for me to spend my money onbut at the same time, this novel have something that might make veteran readers burst into anger. First of all, although i said the character development is good, the way you write it out can piss people off. I almost threw my phone out of anger reading the first 40 chapter. Yes you want to make MC a naive dumb boy but smart i can accept that, but you exaggerate it. You make him look like a beta japanese male weeb in japan. I suggest you need to fastened his maturity progression in the next 10 chapters or veteran readers will immediately drop this novel. Also about Aleshia, just like I said, u exaggerate it. You make her way too paranoid and this will leave reader a bad taste in their mouth regarding her. Its nice to see a proper relationship progression over his maids one by one as to make the story longer and interesting but dont make it too out of line that it disrespect MC dignity as a noble. Also he is not giving any punishment at all. I would like to see all his maids total obedience to him Also for future readers.. i suggest you all to fast read chapter 1 to 40 as to avoid you leaving this novel.Trust me you will be eager to swipe your card past those chapters. Also trust me as long author not losing few screws in the head for future development, this novel will be a good workout for your slumbering dragon. I will give 4* at the moment because of the updates, character development and world background. I will give 5* after this have more chapters, clarification on power level and a better, brave and mature MC with his maids not being so paranoid. Best of luck. I have insulted and scolded a lot of authors in webnovel considering how they are so terrible making improvement in their novels. I have high expectation on this. Dont let me downMy 💰 on you
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