Breaking Ghoul

The story is getting so much messed up .The story depicts mc as some kind of saint do everyone good deeds without much return.I am very interested in the plot line of the novel but i am very disappointed by the direction the novel is going

Still waiting for the big gay, it'll happen at some point, just gotta wait a couple years until then. Also I would like to mention how a bee should be unable to fly. You see, the bee is much larger than its smol wings can carry, but by some logic, the wings carry the bee and it can fly, such a wondrous sight, but a odd one.

Intriguing story. Both Erika and Sebastian have a miserable life and I really hope they'll get some kind of happiness, although is hard to see how. I'll just have to keep reading.Althought there are some writing mistakes here and there, the way you write is compeling, clearly showing their tragedies. It has potential and I hope I won't cry crocodile tears at the end. :))

it's not hard to find overlord on the internet, why don't you try writing fanfiction? I am a hardcore fan of overlord, and I look forward to reading your original work.

Okay, the second review of the day.This is my review after reading chapter 1, it wasn't because of the story not being interring enough, but rather I have no time.So, the plot is a gem, but left unploshed sue to negligence and well, authors lack of consciousness.I ain't sayinG Author isn't good enough or this book is trash. I personally liv d what I read in chapter 1. but as a reader, I should be cursing at the author. it gave me a hard time reading it. so, I was pissed but as a fellow writer I can understand.I would say, to check your para comments, I did as much as I could and try to fix them. don't just change themz review them and think it for yourself. I haven't read the enite story yet.The plot is good, but grammar isn't terrible, but a mess and made it harder to understand, making me reread paras simetimes thrice to comprehend the devine meaning hidden inside of them.So, focus on Style - I can let go of Grammar, but style should be goodGrammarcommas

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I uh, made the mistake of reading it in the middle of the night while camping... weekend trip turned into one night. Fantastic writing! need therapy now...

Another lie. She really was desperate to deceive me. Yet, this proposal caught my attention. Being able to take the trials earlier, and to get more knowledge from this woman was a win win situation.