Bound: A Supernatural Story ✔️

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I want to start this review by saying I quite like it from what I've read so far.It is quite original and the world background is very interesting.Some negative points however are the writing quality, and the narration.While I do think that the writing quality isn't particularly bad I find that there's a lot of grammar mistakes and the expressions used could be improved quite a lot. As for the narration sometimes its simply dry and doesn't convey any meaning, or can get confusing with too much information at once when the sentences aren't structured well.Thanks author I really liked reading your ideas.

Good day. Well, it's past midnight here, so I won't make my review formal as I am extremely sleepy to type. Writing Quality is absolutely great except for the slight punctuation mistakes here and there. One involved a comma, I didn't point out all of them since I didn't want to be nitpicky. When it comes to vocabulary, I like your choice of words. They aren't repetitive, but I would like to suggest that you keep the dialogue tags simple, and not use a thousand alternatives for "said" and "ask." Like what Stephen King said, " I think we all agree that dialogue tags are necessary for readers to know who’s talking. But writers are divided in how we use them:Some, including Raymond Carver, simply use “he said, she said”; others apparently invent a million different synonyms for “said”; still others try to find balance between the two extremes, sometimes even fifty-fifty.Yesterday, yet another writer, Jack Woe, jumped into the fray:I’ve read quite a few blogs about the evilness of dialogue tags. For example, Joe Moore wrote in The Kill Zone how new authors are overusing the alternatives of said.They go to: exclaimed, murmured, screamed, whispered, pleaded, shrieked, demanded, ordered, cried, shouted, and my all-time favorite, muttered.Thing is, I as a reader, don’t care. I just don’t read dialogue tags — at all.He’s not alone. To me, modifying such a perfectly fine tag as “said” is like Pimp My Ride gone bad. (Tip: Read that sentence again in Samuel L. Jackson’s voice.) I suggest you head over to Jack’s blog to read his brief, yet succinct musing over dialogue tags—or as Stephen King puts it in “On Writing”, “dialogue attribution.”A passionate adversary to adverbs, King warns against using adverbs in dialogue attribution, which reduce the effectiveness of the attribution verb:I insist that you use the adverb in dialogue attribution only in the rarest and most special of occasions … and not even then, if you can avoid it. Just to make sure we all know what we’re talking about, examine these three sentences:“Put it down!” she shouted.“Give it back,” he pleaded, “it’s mine.”“Don’t be such a fool, Jekyll,” Utterson said.In these sentences, shouted, pleaded, and said are verbs of dialogue attribution. Now look at these dubious revisions:“Put it down!” she shouted menacingly.“Give it back,” he pleaded abjectly, “it’s mine.”“Don’t be such a fool, Jekyll,” Utterson said contemptuously.The three latter sentences are all weaker than the three former ones, and most readers will see why immediately.[…]Some writers try to evade the no-adverb rule by shooting the attribution verb full of steroids. The result is familiar to any reader of pulp fiction or paperback originals:”“Put the gun down, Utterson!” Jekyll grated.“Never stop kissing me!” Shayna gasped.“You damned tease!” Bill jerked out.The best form of dialogue attribution is said, as in he said, she said, Bill said, Monica said.Keep things simple, but! That doesn't mean you'll only stick with said and asked. Just use them more often. Next, I love the way you convey emotions for your characters. They're very well done. Another suggestion is that you get to the point. An example of this is the first three to four chapters I think in which you spent all those four chapters to reveal she died. Also, during these chapters, I only noticed two things that revolved around it. Her unusual liking to kidnaps and something to do with asking herself if she really is dead. Perhaps you could cut off some unnecessary scenes there. Next, character design. Well done! I was able to imagine the looks of the characters in a few paragraphs or so, I don't believe you're a newbie writer. When I started out writing during my high-school times, I could barely think of any synonyms. There wasn't Google back then, so I had to rely on Thesauruses and Dictionaries in which it could only be found within libraries. Sigh, the nearest library from me that time was so far. It's also quite funny that this the countless time in a row of reading a novel that has something to do with death and being alive again. I guess that's the majority of books here. If there are any suggestions I could give, that would be getting used to using em dashes.You're first person POV is also quite great. It's not the boring, "I went here then go here and so on and so forth" type of first person. Well, that's all I can criticize for now. I know this review isn't formal, I'm missing the front matter and the summary, but then again, I've got to return to my sleep.That is all I can say for now. -Dann Giovanni

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This work is a great find! At first, it seems like a common or unpretentious work, like any work in the "transmigration" genre, which is popular at the moment. However, it is fortunate that this is not the case. At the beginning (and it continues to be because the work is just beginning), we see a clearly stupid and innocent MC, something that should be expected from a high school student on Earth. However, it seems to me that he has great adaptation, in addition to having a great ability to control his "negative" emotions in difficult times. I hope that throughout the work the MC continues to develop, but not just in issues related to his abilities and powers, but his character. He is still very innocent and has a strong tendency to trust the people around him a lot, something that bothers me. I believe that some traumas and situations in a harsh and cruel scenario make you understand that trust is something rare to find, but first you must trust your own powers and abilities and then trust someone else.

Thus, a bloodbath sparked in the midst of the conference, the leaders and their retinue began to kill each other. None of them had survived.

I don't know why but something feels terribly off and Suddenly my senses started tingling(well I named it fate sense) and I immediately jumped at the fastest speed possible towards Alena and made her fall to the ground, the moment we hit the ground a three to four bullets passed through the same place in which Alena stood like a fraction of a second before and hit the walls of the house.

"Alex let loose ancient and dark magic." Max told her as he started to walk the rest of the way across the field.