After Being Rejected by Senior Sisters, My Demoness Master Actually Gave Herself to Me

So firstly I just wanna state that this is actually a good novel, could even be great. I have issues with a few things though. 1stly too much exposition, way too much exposition. This novel could actually benefit from breaking up and expanding the first few chapters to flush out more intricate details and better character development and such. I feel as though the Author loves this novel and has a great many ideas he wants to implement and it shows by coming off as if he's rushing the development of the story. There's a distinct difference between withholding information and slowly trickling it in after hooking the reader with great action beats and giving information dumps to get critical information out of the way. There are some grammar errors as well as spelling flaws, but by far the biggest issue is the exposition. Sometimes it even rips the reader out of immersion of the story. We gain information that could easily be told to us in more creative ways. Overall the author is creative and even though this is a systems novel, I feel they do a great job of utilizing it as a tool rather than the main focus. The main focus is the world, and there's thought put into this world, which is why the exposition drives me up a wall because you are taking away from truly expanding the beauty of the world. I know this may seem like a rant or bashing but I'm only being tough because you gotta gem here, slow down and polish that baby. If you establish that beginning right all that juicy tid bits i know your rushing to get to will pay off even more.

Another level system novel, this one has poor writing style. MC has a system that relies on negative emotions for upgrade (kind of similar to "God Level Demon"), but the story development falls far short of expectations. MC has average intelligence (not very clever, but not too stupid either). It does not help that there are too many extraneous descriptions that do nothing to advance the plot (feels like the author is adding on conversations/ descriptions just to meet the word count requirements). Not highly recommended  (try God Level Demon if you are looking for similar game systems- a far better read).

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does the protagonist say he follows the path of evil? compare him and the mc of reverend insanity or wmw.this novel has absolutely nothing creative and innovative, it is like reading any other novel. the author just added a little '' sex '', '' evil '' and some bs, to create an illusion that this novel is different from the others. this protagonist is by no means intelligent and rational, he does not seem to think what can happen in the future because of his decisions and any treasure, skill ... it is all luck. another very irritating situation is the fact that if an enemy is a woman, there will probably be several situations where the protagonist will start to have some feeling for her. although she previously tried to kill him or capture him, everything in the end seems to be irrelevant because she is a woman.

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I have only read the free chapters so far, but this book seems to actually deal with some of the more difficult things in life, don't want to spoil it with an example though 🙂. The pace of the MC's development of power is very fast, but probably had to be in order for his survival to be at all believable. Well written!

The narration was exceptional. The perks of being a native speaker. Although not all native speakers are well verse in grammar so I appreciate the author's supremacy among others. The story was interesting for me so this novel will surely garner attention in the near future. I am not much of a critique and I say this is outstanding for me. Kudos!

Originally I was just browsing around Webnovel to find something to read and this is novel is such a gem. I won't go into details to avoid spoilers but please give this one a chance it's worth it! And thank you so much author for writing this work it's incredible and brings such joy to my day to see the update!