The garden of Eden

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Is the collapse of Webnovel soon? It seems like six months ago it was perfectly fine but now we are getting 1/3rd the chapters of half the usual amount of books per week, most of which are trash-tier copycat novels from faloo or are just plain bottom-of-the-barrel racist trash.I can hardly even remember any books this year in trial read that had above a 3.5 rating after a week. And that’s honestly hard to achieve with Webnovel’s bots and behind-the-scenes manipulation.

Best novel here in Webnovel.comI advise you guys to read this, very interesting, very funny, very intriguing.Nice Translations, Good World Building, Good Character Design.I give a review of 5.0 Stars!!This review is for Explooooosion!!!

Gets op item that somehow existsKills op bossesBreaks balance of gameSlaps some facesRinse and repeatFck this 'unique' book that doesn't copy paste plot

A popular premise, but well-executed. There’s a few flaws I wanted to point out, in the hope to help you progress.Your grammar is passable, although I would personally refrain from using the passive voice as much as you do. It makes sentences clunky, vague and awkward. So if you can change the subject of the sentence in order to rewrite it in active voice without this changing your meaning, I advise you to do so.There is an absence of rhythm in your writing. I’m aware it isn’t easy to write with rhythm, and personally, I struggle with it as well, but try to bring some more rhythm to your paragraphs.The dialogue is clear, but sometimes it comes across a a bit forced. Overall, I believe your work holds a lot of potential. I wish you luck!

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everything is ok but story develops too op.

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