Mortals of Will

Dear author, I'm loving what you're trying to do and want to succeed, so I'm letting you know what I think from an outside perspective.I can see how much you're influenced by COTE. However, it seems like you're seeking the rewards of the mystery instead of writing a story.COTE has a vibe where seemingly normal interactions are twisted behind the scenes. For example, a woman has Ayanokouji cook for her in one book, similar to your cauliflower soup scene.However, Ayanokouji agrees because he's forced to. People are trying to get him expelled, and she has him cook for her to get him expelled, and he exposed her and didn't get expelled at the end. It's all interconnected.Your scene, by contrast, is just feeding the character's desperation to get him to love her without reason. Later, the scene is meaningless as the Ayato deduces a random ruse in an unearned development. Not the same.Also, duly note that COTE's entertainment factor that balances the lack of action is the games.I'm a bit frustrated because I can see your talent and potential, but didn't get what you can bring.I hope you continue writing this style of novel. I'll look forward to your next work as you learn and improve.Thanks for writing! 🙏

Super garbage tastless bubble gum. How did it even got picked as a candidate? Please pick up something better next time.                                                No.

I can safely assume that all these novels and doujins with mcs coming inside girls are a japanese government conspiracy to instill its citizens with nakadashi fetishes to increase its population

read about 100 chs have say the core concept of novel is great but sadly the writer sidelines it rather write 60-80% about how chi na no.1 or how it's culture is the greatest or the classic ch ina being the victim in every case while rest of the world are the bad guys and in most cases the relatives of the dea d are the typical ch inese people only caring about money they can gain from the dea d guy(truth about ch inese society nowdays)do give it a try as gain the core concept of the novel is very enjoyable to read hope they make similar versions of this just not like this one to increase their social credit scores but rather for the sake of writing a novel and focus more than people (cast) involved then shout CCP great

This story is utterly trash. The author has literally no talent for writing. He contradicts himself in every chapter, can’t decide what power system he wants to use, and cannot make his characters make logical decisions.

This novel is somewhat similar to Anchestor Above. The purpose of the system is to dominate the world, and It’s a bit disappointing to me.I don’t mind mc rulling a place and developed it into the stongest place but to rulling the world with messy government is... no to me.I’ll give this novel 3/5

I have read all of your chapters and I really enjoyed it. I got tired of reading the novels where the MC gets bullied, has family issues, and has a dark past. The characters are well designed and the author foccusses on explaining the small details which made me hooked. I hope other people can see this and read through it. If you are tired of seeing MC getting bullied, weak, trash, garbage back story then this novel is for you.   

Really love this book and it's only been 5chapters😍 So far MC has shown to be level headed and somewhat? street smart. Sadly MC hasn't met ML yet so I'm REALLY looking forward to it.🙏Praying author-san updates soon and dedicates to finishing this novel🥰🥰The writing quality is pretty good, a few errors though but it doesn't take away from enjoying the story. Also I hope that the future chapters elaborate more on the world's background. Overall, I can see a strong foundation being built for an amazing story.👍