Dio, Rise to the top [working title]

hello, good book, I wish it was in Spanish or I could change several languages, I love reading, only English is difficult for me, thank you, I hope you like it 😄😁

Sasuke

Note: I only read 4 chapters.It felt like I was watching a case study in my crim course. The protagonist was chilling to read about, not because descriptions were detailed but due to his reckless decisions and lack of stress in the moment of crime.Despite being written in first person there are actually a lot of points that go unexplained. Decisions are told to the reader then acted upon, not really elaborated on further. It’s a missed chance to get to know the protagonist’s thought process more.Contrary to my previous comment, I think the author has fallen into a trap that you can easily fall into when you write in first person—telling rather than showing. The beginning of the prologue is a good example, there are clearly a lot of emotions but it’s mostly being expressed though monologue. It ends up looking like a rant someone tweeted rather than words in a novel. Describing using literary devices like similies and metaphors can go a long way.Grammar wasn’t terrible, just missed some capitalization of words after the end of a dialogue and a few contradicting use of tenses. At one point there was a section that written in past, present, then past again even though it was referring to the same period in time. I wish you the best on the rest of the novel, Author!

Wonderful story!The writing quality is still good. The stability of updates looks normal. But still, the story development needs improvement. There are a lot of things that needed to fix like grammar.The author is completely aware of his/her limit and she/he puts a lot of effort to establish a good storyline so far. I highly recommend to the editors to check this.

It seems interesting so far. The Main Character's 'cheat' is super childish which leads to a lot of fun situations. He has a bit of a shamelessness to him that makes it even better. There's a lot of moments where he drops the jaws of those around him (in both good and bad ways), and it comes together nicely in a fun world.

This is my second time rereading and on chapter 35 did they compress some things cause he evolved into a brilliant light sparrow that originally wasn’t revealed until early 200’s and late 100’s and he hasn’t met the sword type creature along with meeting the snake (forget his name) in SUPER early chapters

good read the author has uploaded  upto chap 326 on scribblehub

A bullied turned predator, huh. I wonder how it will turn out. Read this novel if you want to see the amazing story of Miam. How he rises through the ranks of specie