REVIEWNarration: Decent and immersiveWorldbuilding: Vast and detailedCharacter development: Nice and steadyCharacter design: OutstandingDialogues: Realistic and LifelikePacing: Not fast nor too slowWriting quality: MagnificentExecution of the Genre: Good pitchStory potential: HighUpdating Stability: SteadyMESSAGENow, this is an amazing work from a native speaker of English! I am very happy to meet one! Such an honour! I am so happy to read it as it was a roller coaster ride of twist and turns of emotions! Amazing work!ADVICEEdits for typos and the Capitalizations of the beginning of the sentence or dialogues. Not sometimes ending the dialogues with period or commas, exclamation or question mark. There were sometimes unnecessary spacings here and there  The grammar was superb though! So feel proud of your work! Amazing! Peace ✌️ And use grammarly! It will help lessen obvious mistakes! 😉