Hello great author, I'm a huge fan of your work! Your book left a lasting impression on me, and I believe it has the potential to reach even more readers. I'd be honored to share some thoughts on how to enhance its impact and visibility. Would you be open to hearing my thoughts?

Theres a lot of problems with this one. The grammar is okay but sometimes goes over the line like adding more verbs like moved, stepped, swooshed, sped, and all that. The formatting is worse too, like its all over the place. Its like someone wrote it with passion but forgot how to make everything make sense. this one has potential yes, but theres a lot of problems. like, the explanations are pretty half assed and lacks cohesion. making a writer be able to control plot? whats with that? just say thats the mcs golden finger and everything will go his way. you even added that the changes in reality is limited, but what kind of limit? can he use it for a thousand times if its just a small change? like, change memories to make the characters fallfor mc? lots of problema the comedy was good thiugh, the banter between the writer dude and mc.Just edit it. fix the grammar. make a proper reflection on what is happening and make it clearer. the thing about the writer about making any changes to the reality, nerf it, like, make him only be able to use it once a week and only in one person. also, why is the baby able to practice his mucles? it doesnt form yet for day old babies. even with it just being seven chapters the faults are visible.overall a mess, mix of passion, impatience, lack of edits, lack of refining on the details, lack of cohesion, the comedy sometimes lands, sometimes the comedy feels forced. Tone down the other comedy you intent since it mostly doesnt work, keep the playful banter between the main character and the writer though, I liked that one. final verdict: 2 stars.good luck and keep writing!

A great novel, I have no idea why it hasn't been contracted yet, but, it's still a great novel anyways.1. Writing quality is a lot better than most books on the platform, with there being only 4-5 writing mistakes every chapter. Also, for some reason, I don't know if it's just me, but I feel like the author uses the word "sneer" in the wrong context, and it just makes the story sound super weird at some points. Other than that, there's just a normal amount of errors per chapter that don't really take away from the story.2. The stability of updates is kinda weird with really sporadic updates, don't know what that's about, but yeah it's pretty inconsistent.3. The story development is pretty average right now, not a pacing that would make your heart race, but not a totally bad pacing either. It's a pretty average speed that's neither really good or bad.4. The character design is, again, like the story development, pretty average, with characters that are pretty well thought out. I just felt that some character traits were forced into certain parts of the story, making it a little weird.5. Now, this world background is outstanding. As of where I am right now, chapter 21, it's totally thought out in its fullest and just seems really intricate. It's really amazing, and I have no critiques on it.Overall, a good novel, and it's free. I mean, for some reason, a lot of the free novels are just a lot better than most contracted novels. Anyways, good job author!

I have no words to describe this masterpiece. Peak, tears are rolling down my face as I write this review. Every word that graces my eyes, increases my attainment of the dao of peak. This novel saved my marriage.

Author Here! So If you have any questions regarding this webnovel you can ask. Short Summary here: It's a yuri story but in start it's main focus on learning magic and all but there will also be scenes where mc and other girls will come closer. After first volume it will be Kingdom Building. So yeah that's it I guess. As for mature scenes tbh they will not be included yet because it takes time in romance and we can't jump directly there (not in volume one)

Author is determined👍 which is something author's rarely do. I would such you to work on your clarity, flow, and pacing, also, make sure to track you characters to avoid any plot holes.I putting five, because Bro is pure Jamaican! 🙃I went to Kingston once (on the internet)

well this novel is funny as hell with twist of action

It's a very nice book and I love the world background a lot. It really got me going. And really made me feel like I'm in the book, like a virtual game.

Garbage story. L. Truly a work of trash. Written by someone who can't read or write. If I could give a rating lower then 1 star, I would. Not even Lenier would subject himself to such a painfully bad story like this.

The writing style is mainly many what ifs, followed by a what is. This makes reading it a sludge. Then comes that many situations have what ifs and after three or so paragraphs you have the what actually happened. Lots of word padding. If those ifs were at least entertaining...

Nice fun story, a bit childish at time for comedic purpose but it wasn’t too unsuferable, i just took it as comedy and rolled with it. Complete english sentences, no paragraphes but one sentence liners (in fully understandable english). Frequent misgendering tho.Overall, a simple but fun story, not pretentious, providing a few hours of entertainment. I just hope the author doesn’t abandon it after getting married.

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