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As an author wannabe there are things in this novel that I absolutely can’t forgive.This story feels like walking in a horrendous museum with a boring and misinformed guide... Basically, the world-building is a prime example of what you should never do in a story. Dumping on the head of your readers information about how the world works and comparing it to our world CONSTANTLY, is not a good way to write an interesting story. Especially when it costs you other pivotal elements, like I don’t know, the characters ? It takes an enormous 15 chapters to see our first new character apart from the MC and the hero... And that would normally be fine if the personality and motivations of the two were developed during that time but, sadly, it’s absolutely not the case... The MC has no personality and the hero while interesting doesn’t really have an impact on anything making all of his lines feel lackluster... Also, this author is a riffle of misinformation, his talk about how spears are not good weapons to use for a war, literally killed me, and unfortunately, it’s not the sole example... he also talks about Europeans from the Middle-Age not bathing or how scholars are wrong saying that samurais didn’t actually use katanas as their main weapon... The people in this world feel really dumb and the world definitely only rotates around the MC. It’s not a feeling or anything like that, it’s just that every character talking in this story only talks about him and how he seems weird or dependable... I also forgot to mention that there is, despite a lot of misdirected world-building, no description of the locations or the characters. The most you’ll get is a :”this girl is really beautiful”.This explains my analogy from the beginning. I argue that the world described to me in this story is just that horrible and that the descriptive narration of the MC makes me feel like I’m in a museum looking at things described by him. I don’t live the events with him, I just watch them. I would like to know about the MC then (to compensate), however we don’t know anything about him hence why he is boring.I would like to add that the author lacks logic too... in one of the first chapters, the MC talks about how he met the hero, he said something like this :” I don’t want to meet the hero to not change the game's main events.” But he enrolls in an elite class thanks to his hard work, the exact same class the hero is in... so something totally avoidable. He then says :” I forgot how we became friends”, even though he tried to avoid him. And finally the nail on the coffin :” The hero was grateful that I was the one who approached him first”, WEREN’T YOU TRYING TO AVOID HIM ??. And all of that, was said in the same exact chapter... does he even have someone to proof-read his story ?Oh and I just talked about how the MC was working hard before the game as preparations doing things like training ? Of course it’s just told to us ! Why would we want to see the first moment of the MC being isekaid and how he adapts and plans to change his fate ? Of course it’s irrelevant ! yes... There is a lot more to say but I choose to leave it at that for now... It can still be enjoyable if you stop thinking and don’t read the fake trivias I think.
