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I really tried to get through this novel. I made it to chapter 29 the first time, and chapter 32 the second time. I usually try to give novels a chance and avoid writing negative reviews, but this one just annoyed me too much.My first major issue is the quality of writing. I'm not sure if it's the translation or the novel itself, but there are so many mistakes that it became a chore to read because I kept having to mentally keep track of things and figure it out on my own.1: NamesMultiple names are mixed up so the reader has to follow along based on context. There were four characters by chapter 30 that this occurred with most frequently---MC's friend and researcher subordinate Li Chengrui, and MC's sexist admirer combat team leader Lu Changhui. The latter was introduced with the former's name and kept that name until several chapters later when it suddenly changed to Lu Changhui, and I suspect this only happened because his name was the chapter's title.-An omega named Fang Qin who ran away after being trafficked and was given a temporary mark by Li Chengrui, and an omega also named Fang Qin who was trafficked, repeatedly r*ped, had his glands damaged, and wanted to die. I do not know whose name is wrong.2: Sentence structureThere are many issues regarding who said/did what and noun/pronoun placement.Like if I wrote [MC gave ML the box] but it was actually supposed to be the other way around with ML giving MC the box. Or MC spoke but his subordinate's name was written instead. Or an example from chapter 30 where someone was supposed to say "She, a mere captain, actually didn't want to sleep with me", but it was written as "After sleeping with me, she still wants to be a mere captain. She didn't want it".Usually it's alright, but sometimes "I", "she", "he" etc are used wrongly, and with the above issues, following along is hard.And chapter 9 is just a wall of text with no paragraphs??? I get that this happens sometimes but it's a pain to read.3: CharacterisationMC's personality changed at around the chapter 30 mark which is why I dropped this. I understand that he was in his heat period, but he went from a cool, collected badass to someone who cried easily, got into fistfights at the drop of a hat, and lost his scheming intelligence.ML fell in love s*upidly fast and the bad guys are dumber than bricks considering their positions.4: Other issuesThe plot became cliché. The characters started becoming flat too. By chapter 29, it's like everything started going downhill, which is surprising since this is when the action began and the plot should have picked up.Frankly, I'm disappointed. I enjoyed the beginning of this novel. It was a good premise. It's just a shame that the ball was dropped.
