Housekeeper of the Hundred Blossom Palace Chapter 17 Discussion

Dropped this after 17 chapters. The other reviewers were right that this reads like an amateur fanfiction written by a teenager. I don't know if it's the translations or the actual author but sentences are short, abrupt, tenses were mixed up, and sometimes the wording and phrases reads like it's trying to sound sophisticated to the point where it felt like it was trying to be a Victorian novel era fanfiction. The translations were also peppered with semi colons for no good reason.

Examples of over use of semicolons from chapter 1 alone:

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Yui Mei was raised in the nunnery until she turned seven; by then, she learned about her own story through the gossiping nuns.

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Her black hair was tinged with a shade of midnight blue; it was a marvelous sight, indeed.

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She even went to China with her friends to attend fan events; not just once but multiple times at that.

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Terrible writing or translation? Examples of trying to sound sophisticated:

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A beauty had the lowest status among the empress and the imperial wives. Moreover, she originally entered the palace as a court lady. She was only favored because of her hair, which caught the eye of the emperor despite her plainness. By the way, Yui Mei’s hair color was inherited from her mother.

Apparently, she was promoted since she gave birth to the emperor’s child. And it also became the reason why she, a person with no connections, drew the ire and envy of the consorts above her.

Indeed, the place called inner palace was hell swirling with the grudges and hatred of women.

Nevertheless, it was also a fact that Yui Mei was somewhat interested. The inner palace was a world that she obsessively stared at on the computer screen in her previous world, after all.

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Moreover? By the way? Apparently? Indeed? Nevertheless? Same sentence structures over and over again.

I love commas, but boy are there a lot of commas. Though it seems like they don't likw the Oxford comma. This example shows that, in addition to amateur writing:

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People clad in gorgeous clothes scrutinized Yui Mei’s group while pacing to and fro. It must have been quite a rare sight for them to see country bumpkin girls appearing in the capital.

However, Yui Mei and the girls paid them no heed, since they had already accepted the fact that they were country bumpkins, indeed. They just continued observing their surroundings.

They saw the disorderly pedestrian traffic, white earthen walls and the wooden buildings. Far off in the distance, an enormous vermilion building stood. It must be the home of the emperor.

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Anyway, I dropped it due to terrible writing and grammar. It just made reading such a chore and bore.