I’ll Make It A Bad Ending Like A Villain
- Thread starter Zefyr
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- #20
Chapter 16 starts with the MC's second test combating the wild boar in the arena. After barely avoiding paralysis caused by fear, Filina manages to defeat the wild boar by slicing it in half. The third test begins and she has to fight more of the suckers. As she does so, she recalls several of her previous deaths, moving to a flow state in the process. (In the second life as Filina, the MC was apparently strangled by Henry.) When the dust settles, she is triumphant but thoughtful. However, as Henry rocks up for his own test, several candidates accuse her of cheating and she heads to the lab for an investigation.
That was an action-packed chapter. Kind of interesting seeing the MC get in the zone a bit. However, I wish the author took more advantage of the concept of combat-based tunnel vision. Combat-based tunnel vision is a real phenomenon, as the human body pushes blood to areas deemed important to survival for ancient ancestors. (We end up focusing on a single threat ahead of us.) Instead, the author moved to a more theatrical storytelling element which is primarily used to inform the reader of certain things about the relevant character. Whilst both storytelling methods have merit, the consideration is time. If the time for said musings doesn't mesh with the time of the threat, then it feels more like a DBZ fight. Ergo, I think the combat-based tunnel vision idea would fit a bit better for the action sequence. (personal preference, obviously)
That was an action-packed chapter. Kind of interesting seeing the MC get in the zone a bit. However, I wish the author took more advantage of the concept of combat-based tunnel vision. Combat-based tunnel vision is a real phenomenon, as the human body pushes blood to areas deemed important to survival for ancient ancestors. (We end up focusing on a single threat ahead of us.) Instead, the author moved to a more theatrical storytelling element which is primarily used to inform the reader of certain things about the relevant character. Whilst both storytelling methods have merit, the consideration is time. If the time for said musings doesn't mesh with the time of the threat, then it feels more like a DBZ fight. Ergo, I think the combat-based tunnel vision idea would fit a bit better for the action sequence. (personal preference, obviously)
- #23
Chapter 14 sees Filinia's test in full swing. We are introduced to a weirdo wearing a mask (dark hair and eyes) and another with red eyes. However, a weirdo with red eyes decides to mess with her during a 1000m run. (based on his comments to her, it seems he is aware of her cheating...) In any case, the resident weirdo with red eyes speeds past her at the last minute to take second place. The dude with the mask gets first place. As they catch their breath, the masked dude disappears and she realises soon after that it was Leon.
This here is what we call a 'shenanigans chapter'. It was silly fun and we are introduced to a few new characters. The dude in the mask (who doesn't get any dialogue) is one of the important characters - Leon. Most of us have been waiting to meet the dude that she has been working hard to find and his enigmatic introduction into the series was pretty cool. However, the real MVP for this chapter is the red-eyed dude that was clearly flexing throughout the test.
This here is what we call a 'shenanigans chapter'. It was silly fun and we are introduced to a few new characters. The dude in the mask (who doesn't get any dialogue) is one of the important characters - Leon. Most of us have been waiting to meet the dude that she has been working hard to find and his enigmatic introduction into the series was pretty cool. However, the real MVP for this chapter is the red-eyed dude that was clearly flexing throughout the test.
- #25
Ok fine, I was just saying that she is too absorbed in her hate, that I am afraid she's just attracting his attention, which is dangerous, now he's gonna try to know her. And becuse of living and suffering for 4 lifetimes that she isnt that mentally fine, I'll just let that inner monologue of her hate and stuff pass, its just annoying to read