ZILAYEFA

After reading up to 5 chapter. So far I must say that I'm impressed by story so far. The writing is good with no grammar issues.A small criticism I have is that the chapters are quite long. Maybe cutting them down into small paragraph.overall, enjoying it so far

This is one of the best football stories I've read, imo keep up the great work if I could gift I definitely would looking forward to more updates.

I love this book already  🥰Few chapters in and I'm  hooked  !!!The scenes are so detailed I need More chapter!!!Keep updating I'm following

Jaeden sat slumped back on his couch at home looking at the ceiling. His mom was asking him if he wanted to eat but his mind was not there. While staring at the ceiling he was reliving the race. His first podium in an official racing season! Everyone was proud, his family, friends, team, and competitors congratulated him boosting his ego. This lasted for some time until he got home. As soon as they entered the house the fatigue kicked in. The race was far more intensive then he could have ever expected. He dragged himself to the shower and crashed into bed straight after. And now here he was sitting on the couch zoning out.

Suddenly a laughter filled the room and all the boys looked in the direction it was coming from. Namjoon tickling Jungkook.

Many of the people who saw the person appear, began to gather at the entrance of the village. They were all staring at the nude elf which suddenly came from the direction of the beach. Though off in the distance, although it was an hours run away, they could see the large dragon off the horizon.

    "Tak biasanya kau berkata seperti ini. Sesaat aku baru teringat bahwa kau ini seorang penulis."

The portal had thrown me out  "oww!" I had hit my head on the wall Catherine was out cold on the floor and Mal just came out unharmed "I knew she couldn't take it" Mal prodded Catherine's face, she woke up "What are you doing!" she pushed Mal away from her face and sat up against the wall "where are we Mal" I looked around the room it seemed to be an office of some kind before Mal could speak the door was kicked open "WHO THE HELL-" it was a middle aged woman wear a maids uniform "oh its you two! What are you doing in here?" I looked over to the wall where the portal was and it wasn't there " miscalculation with the portal should of been in my room" the maid smiled and nodded