Visfall

I like the storyline especially the way the point of view was delivered it was definitely expressive

As you travel your way through the eyes of two wanderers, Asahi and Aletha, what secrets are thou ready to be discovered from your wandering? What can you find about the origins of the world and the people who dwell in it? What happened to the other wanderer all those years ago? What is the Verity of this world, and most importantly, what is the reasoning for the wretched Creator's attack?These are questions that you must find out... for yourself.* * * * *This story is all pre-planned and it will have Eight volumes.Make sure to add the story to your library if you are interested! If it's slow-paced, please note that it will get better as the story goes on. To see the character illustrations, go to the archive and turn on paragraph comments! Thank you! ^-^

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Normally when the story is not yet advanced but has both qualities and defects I would leave 4 stars but in this case the qualities are much superior and therefore I leave 5 stars. I start by saying that for lovers of the genre this is a candidate to be one of the best novels on the platform. Starting from the protagonist I can say that he can certainly improve but he is certainly not the worst I have seen in this type of novel (some choices that made me criticize are explained in the following chapters as his anger for the demonic beasts). The characterization of the characters is well done and the interactions between them have an excellent rhythm not blocking the narrative but giving it push. All the situations that are created are well described and even the environment in which they take place can be viewed with a few simple words without overdoing it. Fighting and skills are a strong point as they are really well done. The description of the world is still bland but some clues have already made it clear that there is much more than the academy to discover. If you are undecided whether or not to read this novel, do it as you will not regret it.Now some negative traits at least from my point of view ...SPOILER1) The MC physique that makes it OP should be explained more deeply otherwise you cannot understand how it manages to win in certain situations. Perhaps an initial chapter which explains both this and the various ranks, rank of skills, his contract with Lumi, etc. could facilitate it all;2) In some cases the choices of the MC are truly questionable especially with the antihero TAG .... I am not talking about the choice to go and fight the demonic beasts during the academic competition as his anger towards them is understood by the short backstory that is described later but of other choices see how he does not try in the least to take for himself the dungeon where the protagonists they will have a power up, the refusal to be a disciple of the strongest sorceress only because otherwise he would have to leave his academy (he is dying and she could help him immediately instead of waiting for years for a dragon heart) or the refusal to be a disciple of Zeva only because Lucas must be his disciple for become stronger. He "inherited" the body of someone who had the dream of becoming the strongest but all the choices he makes go against it and even his desire seems minimal since after having obtained the possibility of unlocking the empty element he has not tried in the least . Now with the clash with the so-called "Heroes" I hope he starts thinking only of himself and taking everything he can without following the cliche of "let's not ruin the hero's path". Unlike other MCs of other novels Aestrea is not "broken" mentally so this double version of itself good and bad sometimes for stupid reasons tends to diminish the vision of him.Having said that, I want to clarify that "2" can be more of a personal opinion than anything else as some may find themselves with his actions.Having said that, I wish the author good luck!

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great job 👍 would love to have more of these characters

very good book, update more chapters please

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