Underneath The Storyline

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The creativity of this book surprised me. It's hard to imagine MC growing up through apprenticeship. It looks good at the moment, I hope the author can maintain this level! Don't write worse and worse like many novels!

Although I myself am not a fan of the reverse harem genre and also of its counterpart in the Male Leading stories, I would give this one a try, as I could already see there’s much to be anticipated from the story’s FL and MC’s development. This story looks more than promising, and I must say the author has greatly improved in this compared to her other works, where I have only read their stories halfway. Let’s see how our MC will fare in this dangerous world where she pits against werewolves and other human women as challenged to rise to the top.

So, this is definitely AI gen work. I am not just making things up here, I have attached proof. This isn't even the most advanced AI detector. You can literally use anyone on the internet to check how bad this is.Now onto the next part:The MCs character is annoying, he has a very shallow character. But I can ignore that as a blank slate for reader to self insert themselves like most Japanese protagonists. But even then I cannot ignore the story progression. Gandhari making decisions for him in front of Indira, while saying she'll save him.  The annoying fact that Krishna already knew about his reincarnation but if that was not enough, he added oil to the fire by telling him more about himself, the system too. Just makes you wonder where this is going. He is going for Pandava friendship, while the Pandavas don't even want him. The only good thing I found in the 20+ chapters is the bow battle against Arjun, and that's it.Also, I'll mention something else which is very annoying. A lot of chapters are told from another view all over again. This is clearly a way to increase chapter count. Don't get me wrong, multiple POVs are a good thing, but what the author is doing instead is telling you a summary of first two chapters in the new 3rd chapter. This seems an honestly bad writing decision at best and a really evil ploy to scam us for more money while giving 2/3 of the content at worst. I'll give the author the benefit of the doubt and hope it's the former.Tbf neither the story decisions nor the characters are likeable. All the people you are supposed to like, you'll dislike and all the ones you are supposed to dislike, you will dislike too :). Basically nothing to root for in the story. I have read till 40+ chaps for now. Just one above the free version, I might sound critical, but this is a paid novel. I will be paying for it, so it has to be worth the money, and with the glaring issues I doubt it is that.All that being said. These are just the issues I had, so, I thought I'll point them out. However, I do know that writing is hard, and I wish you all the best in your future endeavors. Just be positive and try not to use AI, it strips the soul off your work, and you'll not really improve either.Good Luck Man.

"Please, everyone, you may stand up." She said at first.

"Who said we are?"

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