Unbroken Melody

Hi Everyone,This is my first book (I've written a few others but gave up quickly), I will try my best to remain faithful but I have college so I might not be very consistent. I hope you enjoy and please leave feedback or encouragement or even criticism so I can feel motivated to continue!

"Eclipsed By Fate"The story follows Noor, a brilliant businesswoman and martial artist, who hides her sorrowful past behind a calm and composed exterior. Devoted to helping orphans, she struggles with emotional scars, guilt, and enemies from her shadowed life.Sanlang, a rising actor, enters Noor's life when she rescues him from an auction and offers him a choice—freedom or staying as her servant. Their bond grows, but Noor's guarded demeanor and Sanlang's fragmented memories create tension. Their love is tested as enemies threaten their survival and past secrets resurface.A tale of sacrifice, redemption, and forbidden love, Eclipsed By Fate explores trust, loss, and the cost of protecting loved ones. Noor and Sanlang find fleeting hope in their connection, but can their love withstand the challenges of their eclipsed fate?

Good book so far but where are the system rewards 😭 or how are they being used ?

This is a below avrage xanxia story, told from an asian perspective, having all the overdone tropes and attitudes indicative of this style of writing. This story has no real depth to any of the characters, even the mc. All interactions are poorly articulated as well as way over done, and throughout the story, there is little to no description of anything. Ninety-eight percent of this story is all tell, and maybe two percent is show, if even that.

I am hooked already and I'mma stay till the end. Curious to see how it goes for Peanut and the ending!! Keep it up please!! It's a refreshing story to read as the characters feel so lively with their own mindset and personality. Love how it's written.

Both of them left the store awhile Yuuichi saying.

Pero malabong mangyari yun eh. Sa ayaw at sa ayaw mo kailangan mong pagdaanan lahat. Yung sakit na nanamnamin mo sa hapdi.

I experienced an unprecedented feeling, it feels so good! As expected, a virgin's pussy is indeed tight! I couldn't help but get the urge to ejaculate, but I restrained myself. I pushed further inside and felt my cock come up against her hymen. The girl tensed up.