Thriller World Game

I am the author, I want you to tell me what you think of this beginning of the story, if it should continue, if you see a future, your opinions, what should be improved regarding the way of narrating, if you want more details of the environment, whatever you want. I am all ears in constructive criticism

[Writing quality {4} + Stability of updates {5} + Character design {4.2} ]:- As they say 'consistency is the key' and author is indeed consistent whether it's about writing quality, updates or keeping characters in their distinct but pre-established character (pun intended), he has done it right. Characters have certain depth and you will come to appreciate it as story further progress [Story development {4.2} + World background{4} ]:- As of ch170 you can expect a fleshed out story development and world background. ##Real Rating=4.1*[*=if removed stability of update criteria]Criticisms:- While reading it Author will be able to somewhat convince you it was planned and despite not seeing off camera characters they are vital to story's progression but it's true only for star characters, many others are forgotten like that old pen fallen somewhere behind tabe only to be discovered later for plot. All in all this is a good read and has potentially everything which needed to be an awesome book to recommend. And we can see it's very early in the development of story so hopefully in future it actualize its potential

hmm. quite plain. fm is too plain tho. hopefully it gets better over time

He placed the VR headset on and laid down on his bed, taking in a deep breath he pressed the button on the side of the headset to initiate the initial setup. It was just like falling asleep, transitioning to a dream seamlessly without delay. After a few seconds, there was a change in the darkness that surrounded him. A blue screen popped up in front of him, "New user detected, bind this headset to the user?" "Yes

And we could all use a little change

- god emperor

In her mind, she is still doubting but she decides to give it try.  After all, the beast has indeed taken care of her when she was sick,

Aria appreciated a lot the fact that her brother would always back her . In the past things were complicated but now she was more clear about her surroundings be it good or bad , she could handle them well on her own .