The Stoner & The Blind Girl

Story is well written, and has quite a bit of future potential. Just remember this though, if you yourself, enjoy writing your stories, then that is the one thing that should matter the most more then anything else. Sometimes, it is not about any sort of money or payment, but should in fact, always be about enjoying sharing your work with your viewers and fans. And that, should always take priority, because if your fans and viewers enjoy reading your work, as well as potential future generations, then that is the one thing, that should matter more to you then anything else. For you see, people are more concerned in living in the here and now. While people me, we like to have a more, long game in mind. Now, don't take this as some sort of negative by any means, I am just saying, that if we want future generations to enjoy this world, then we have to be willing to protect what we love, in an effort to do our best to better our future.Your turn. And I look forward to your thoughts on my Going In Completely Blind fanfic.

The writing is good, plot is kind of unique but character development is needed. The main story goes around Iori but still now she is playing the role of weak, inocent woman...

Well, the years start coming and they don't stop coming

Silvana looked around as she spoke, " I do feel the energy, and your words ring true to my ears.  No one lies to the huntress. "

       The reason he was the one to pick one among them was because the managers who had conducted the serial interviews had become emotionally tied to these two because they were extral ordinarily brilliant. They were always tied all through this interviews, but at the tail end Tosin had slight edge above the other guy.

Noticing a strange chakra pulse in Danzo's body, Kai-La sped to Danzo and ripped the arm off. He threw it into a pocket dimension for later study. 'Glad I was able to do that before anything happened.'

"Of course we are also happy that we are your parents. We love you just like our own" said Mom who hugged me with warmth. So this is what it means to be loved. I will get used to this.

One day when Riya was coming back from school and was with her friends then pic a bus for home then she suddenly notice a person sitting near and felt like she saw him before. So she just tapped on his shoulder and recognise him. She said "Monu !! What are you doing here ?". It's been a very long time since they didn't see eachother. They both a lot of conversation they were happy to see eachother but both were behaving like a normal friend. After that Riya always search for him and Monu too. Monu waited for so many times to meet her but Riya didn't understand it because now she knows that if she fell for him again then she will hurt herself again because he will leave her again so she just reject all his feelings. Monu was so preserved about her so he feel sad about it. One day when they were chatting all of a sudden they started arguing with each other and the argument become so big that they never see and talk eachother after that and everything become quite again