THE LAWLESS STRUGGLE

Its quite engaging, emotional and gets you having these mixed emotions about everything. Its a good emotional read. Loving it so far. Keep up d good work👏

The Divine Blades has a lot of potential, especially with its reincarnation and magic-based world. Soujin’s journey as a reluctant captain is engaging, but the story could benefit from more development in a few key areas.For example, in Chapter 4: Captain's Meeting, many side characters are introduced briefly, but we don’t get much insight into their personalities. Adding personal traits or conflicts for the other captains could make the scene more memorable and make the stakes feel higher.The dialogue, particularly in Chapter 7: Preparations, often feels a bit flat. When Soujin and Muffet talk about their mission, there’s a lot of straightforward back-and-forth, but not enough emotional tension. It’d be nice to see more hesitation or humor woven in, giving their relationship more depth.Similarly, the action scenes, like the dragon fight in Chapter 3: Dragon Slayer, could benefit from richer descriptions. Instead of saying "Soujin slashed the dragon," you could slow down the moment with more sensory details: “Soujin’s blade scraped against the dragon’s hardened scales, sparks flying as the weight of the beast’s body strained his grip.” This would immerse readers more deeply in the battle.In Chapter 5: Serious Matter, Soujin faces the pressure of leadership, but his inner struggles aren’t fully explored. Does he feel fear, excitement, or doubt? Expanding on his internal conflict would make him more relatable and add emotional depth to the plot.Finally, the world-building is intriguing, but it could be more seamlessly integrated into the narrative. In Chapter 6: Money, for instance, you get a glimpse into the logistical side of being a Divine Blade, but it feels disconnected from the grander fantasy setting. Tying these details more closely to the world’s politics or culture would make the setting richer.Overall, it’s a solid start, but fleshing out the characters, dialogue, and descriptions would take The Divine Blades to the next level. I’m looking forward to seeing how the story evolves!

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i m not good at writing review so just my honest take on the novel so far.-pace is good most of the time but sometime quite slow-i don know about others but i really like if you give more detail out for the character. just my opinion on this one-i believe when theres a great battle about to happen you could just delay some of the chapter  and then boom mass release so we could feel the fight more closely-thats all, for me this novel is good

The giant and the fish that were blocking the Sunny from progressing were beginning to grate on Itachi's nerves, as he wanted a quiet journey and an opportunity to relax and get to know the crew but it had been one issue after another and frankly he had had enough so when singing filled the filled his ears as the fabled 'Flying Dutchman' Came into view Itachi decided enough was enough.

     As the sun rose Dax awoke from his makeshift bed he had set up in one of the caves near the top of the mountain. He sighed.

As in it's borderline repulsive.

He left us during my 2nd year in highschool and that's why I left my first highschool to transfer to my mother's hometown's highschool.