Shadows of the undead

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—— Naruto's Mindscape ——

Veer smiled and said "Okay then. Consider that this universe is a big lake which has its own ecology with different living beings and laws governing it. Small ripples are caused when a fish or small toad jumps on the water surface or when a small pebble is thrown in the water. There might be one or many small ripples at a time. You can imagine how ripples can superimpose on each other and how they get merged with lake system slowly. These ripples only affect the very small area where they generate and for only a small time. They adjust themselves and go away after making a small impact. Every ripple is a law in itself and it ends after doing its work. Ripples are generated by some event and are not permanent."

Pretty nice story. The writing quality can improve because I believe in ya. Still, I'm giving these 5 star for the effort in trying to give entertainment to readers. I hope you continue your writing journey and don't be discourage along the way. Good luck and I hope I can see the end of this novel.

It’s good. It definitely has an avatar vibe for a while but goes off to be it’s own thing. Mc is really loud when he fight and his only moves so far that I’ve seen is stab in the chest and roar like an idiot 😂. It can definitely go somewhere and it’s doing great, but he’s to agressive in what he does at times, before the story started it said he was a special forces operative that had a really good ability to read the situation and his surroundings but I’m not seeing this at all.

I've read up to chapter 400 so far and I would say this story is ok at best. The author goes into a lot of detail with describing the things the MC is doing while crafting, which at the start I thought was good and even necessary to sort of lay the foundation and give the reader a better understanding of what was happening, as well as visualize the crating process. What I didn't like is that the author continues to write about crafting in great detail like this for the rest of the story. Now there's nothing wrong with the crafting aspects in these kind of stories, in fact I enjoy the crafting parts a lot. The problem is there is not enough action/adventure or story development taking place to balance out the crafting aspect and it gets tiresome to read. The beginning of the story was decent as the MC first enters the game prior to its official release and reaches his first town where he begins crafting in the various styles like smithing, leather working, tailoring, alchemy etc. This goes on for a few dozen chapters, and just when it's starting to get boring, the MC leaves the first town and starts traveling. Then the story picks up a bit and gets more interesting for a little while, until the MC goes to sea to reach some islands. At this point the pacing of the story takes a dramatic plunge and is almost completely focused on crafting during the voyage with only a few plot developments for about 150 chapters, and became painful to read. After the MC finally reaches the islands the story starts gets interesting again for a little while, before falling right back into monotonous crafting. As for the MC's life irl, most of it I found boring, unnecessary, and during one part, even offensive. I was holding out, hoping the story would get better after other players started entering the game, but by chapter 400 the game hasn't even been opened to the public yet, and I'm probably going to drop this. For some, this might be a good story, but it just didn't suit my tastes. If you're looking for a good story with the right balance of action/adventure, story development, and crafting, I would highly suggest reading "Overgeared" instead of this.

It some personal dislike but first guy recive quest to some push-ups and so on, he have no trained body at all but he with his will do 100 of them somehow(it even written that 20 push-ups was his limit that get him weak arms) why not 10000 in the first time if his will only matter ? But it not worst thing, he trained and got some stats growed passively, and after one training he finished quest and got rewarded he got some stat points and he spend it all, why? Man have 15 years of new life experience that he spent By playing games he does not ask about drowbacks of it, will it limit stat growing in the furure or some of that thigs, btw man know about novels with and systems from previous life so he must think of it first. Is he stupid or just have some brain damage or he can not think about future grow idk. As i said probably personal dislike, i think mc is stupid.