No Second Chances Apocalypse

Weapon- l____l - choose

Harry is sitting in his normal seat in front. I want to ask Liam fo switch seats with me but I don't want to have to explain why. Harry is wearing a white T-shirt for once and his tattoos are visible underneath it. It amazes me how attractive I find his tattoos and piercings, I have never cared for either before I look away quickly and pull out my notes. I hope Liam arrives soon so I won't feel so alone with Harry.

1. Characters are sloppy. Main character in particular can't seem to control himself and the author's portrayal of him is shaky as **** as his character changes from chapter to chapter, going from unsteady in one chapter to professional assassin in another with no foreshadowing. Similarly, plot line forces MC to make MANY MANY STUPID decisions for him to end with "I need to learn how to do xxxx better next time." Guess what happens when next time comes. It horribly idiotic and it never stops even after 200 chapters. Other characters are more consistent, but that has more to do with they being 1 dimensional rather than author's abilities. 2. word selection by author is awkward and the way they address each other can get on your nerves. 3. Story development is also non-existent. MC has little to no goals other than to graduate from academy and presumably slack off somewhere. His character however does not match as he can suddenly get hot blooded, suddenly fiery, and then regret once the fight is over because he showed off too much. Note that this does not change and he continues to do stupid things to show off repeatedly to no benefit whatsoever.

Thank you for this wonderful story, I really love this story it's captivating and I love the thrilling and suspense in it as well as the adventure I can't wait to the next update.

Is this a fan fic? I made this review not becuase I wanted to give you 5 stars I just wanted to see if it was a fan fiction novel inspired by "i'm really a Superstar" btw all that crap was because of the 140 comment crap thing

I know it’s a bit early on to give a review so I’m giving it a medium review which I hope is ok don’t want to be harsh love seeing fellow new writers but I see myself so much of myself in your writing style and personal wanted to give you something to be able to reflect on and some motivation to write I will read your story and I will be waiting to see if you to continue I have also commented on your chapters as well saying similar things but i wish to repeat in more detail.Good things1.You have the idea always important 2.you have ok grammar could use a little improvement but that’s fine we’re not professional writersThings you could improve1.Context matters build up a description of your character, new family, new world, compare2.cultivation isn’t everything as I feel a problem all novels especially young one who set themselves these massive cultivation realms with fancy words is they often have no meaning to a reader there just word so try and help the audience gain insight on what they mean and how strong each realm is don’t go into to much detail3.personally don’t like first person too much and I think you would find it easier to write in the 3rd (my opinion lol)Please continue to write I will read!!!Shameless promotion time Checkout blind saint as I’m currently writing it it’s not great but I think you might be good for you to read a style of writing that’s the opposite of your own

Author pls continue this story pls it’s soo good

I just love this Novel so Far. And inalso love the dYnamic between the two.