Memoirs of Death

Overall, it's not bad, with a lot of plot and content

A good story so far! I do hope that Yoon ah would be able to find someone who loves her for who she truly is. Loving it so far. Keep it, author💝

First let me start of by saying the reasons I like this novel.The main selling point is the unusual ability of MC to control insects and his merciles persona. Besides that, I personally think the interaction with the spider girl, Victoria is very cute.I always appreciate a good romance inside a novel—not too dramatic, nor too light—along with strong action sequences. If these two factors remain consistent throughout the novel, I might give it a full read until it's finished.I don't think a brilliant writing quality is necessary to attract someone like me, as long as it's not unbearable grammer or too AI generated, its fine.I don't know in which direction the story is shaping—this early in the novel, so I can't really comment about that. Though, I can feel you are trying to build something solid with the flow it's going.Honestly, and I mean I'll be very frank; I'm in it for the spider girl and well made characters, each having a distinct personality. As for the aspects you can improve on:when shifting from a emotion invoking scene to a different one—completely unrelated to it, try not to include too much details or added information in the following scene. I'm saying this because people, when already stirred with emotions beforehand, tend to skim past the long paragraphs filled with information, because they are forced to surrender the emotional content they felt earlier.Now onto the world building. I feel like you can improve on it; you know... adding a bit more depth and information about the world, or perhaps highlighting the surrounding atmosphere and vibes.Consistent upload schedule is always a given. There is no compromise in this, if you want to have a successful novel in this app, especially at the start.And yea, that's about it.. nothing more I can critique on. Keep up the good workP.S: all of these are simply my personal opinions, and I never claim to be an expert.also P.S: I'm a HUGE sucker for good fluffy romance, and action scene.

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Seing the sun rising outside the window i thought to myself fuck another night without sleep, Ian have barely been able to sleep at all this week. He got out of his bed and started getting ready for another boring day at his job as a cleaner at the local highschool. Walking towards the toilet getting ready to brush my teeths, I started thinking to myself is this really what i want to do with my life? working as a cleaner for the local highschool, living in a crappy apartment barely getting by, no family and the worst part no girlfriend. I always dreamed of traveling the world and explore, and i always wanted a harem of girls that loves me how nice would that be.

- A crystal created by integrating quite alot of souls. Useful for many things.

His appearance matched that of a towering fox, yet as he walked through toward the door no one blinked at him. He walked in the kitchen and took some food, yet no one even glanced. Even when he slid between two men talking, completely breaking their view of each other, they didn't ever shift their eyes.