Lost Saint

An interesting read, not gonna lie I quite enjoyed it. While there are some mistakes in your spelling and grammar here and there, the overall story is still very much enjoyable.A few tips so you can grow. :)The synopsis is one of the most important element of your novel. It is imperative that it is perfect, without any spelling mistakes. :)

My mouth agape, I searched the room for confirmation. Everyone was silent. My father and Connor were smiling and shaking their heads in agreement. I wanted to punch my past self for agreeing to something I had not been paying attention to.

" Yubelluna " kata Raiser

4990 A.D. Three years ago...

The skies slowly began to darken. By now, the mercenaries had produced a large amount of food and cheap wine. The quality of life in the outpost really was thousands of times better than life in the ruins, as least in terms of food. The mercenaries had access to both meat and vegetables! The meat came from all kinds of mutabeasts, was served on platters, and had actually been cooked properly. Cloudhawk was able to smell their enticing aroma from far away.

Viole met Charles stare, he was watching him, his good eye staring unblinkingly up at him. With his transformed hands, he carefully tried to hold Charles, careful not to glaze him with his long nails. Charles seems like a doll so fragile, and for a moment he felt a pang of guilt. Charles could easily have died, and worse, he may still die tonight.

Date 22 time 12:00pm (john) ghar par tha.

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