Glorious Smash

It sounds interesting man! But at chapter 1 I got 2 points: Too much stuttering😂 and also mixing up the tenses, but that is not something necessarily bad. To me some just some of the sentences sound weird. Also it might be a bit confusing, but I guess that’ll solve itself when you continue the story.As a starting author myself, I must say that the story’s got potential man, so keep writing.

Hello :D.  this is a fun read but I have to point out the bad to talk about the good part.It’s entertaining, but it struggles to find its footing beyond its initial hook. The premise is undeniably intriguing. It’s a clever subversion of traditional fantasy tropes, and the first few chapters establish the stakes well. However, the execution quickly falls into predictable patterns. The protagonist, while amusing, lacks the complexity needed to carry the story. His motivations often feel surface-level. The supporting cast fares even worse, with most of them reduced to one-dimensional archetypes. It quickly falls into the trap of being a one-note character. (I think that in later chapters you may or may not improve on this since I had only read the first 20 chapters .)It have potential for World-Building and it still holds entertainment value for readers who enjoy fast-paced, easy-to-digest fantasy stories. Worth the shot to read and it was fun one.A literature nerds (example me lol) can feel this novel lacking in places but it in the end it's still your work of passion and I repect that. So continue writing with all of your might :D .

if you drop this then you are gay.......

You're bundled up now, wait till you get older

"Oh come on we've done this before isn't it easy?"

Dear god I love this story it’s ****** and great. Love that the chapters are long but wish there was more of them. ( please don’t make a lot of short ones only thing worse is the chapters that are 1.1 1.2 1.3 and are short as hel ) but this is a great dungeon story/ mmorpg.

Another trash novel not the worth the time to read. Not even good enough to read on the toilet and I wouldn't even use it to wipe my a*s after mexican food.Dumba*s MC and dumba*s author.

hi author here. Sorry for such a mess up. I assure you this story is even better than last time. please do support me by reading this again as i commit myself to atleast 1 chap update