Chronicles Of The Shadow Sovereign

This is a good novel so far, above average for the genre in my opinion except for one problem that I have. I think the conflict developing with the military is a bit dumb. My first issue is, why would the military behave this way? I understand the mc, in my mind he’s basically a feral animal right now, he feels cornered by the world and like he can’t trust anyone but Charlotte, it’s really good and I’m enjoying it a lot. But this military thing could have played out a lot better, firstly we already know the doctor is working with the military as an informant right? So instead of kidnapping his sister like a bunch of idiots and 100% guaranteeing an antagonistic relationship with a future power house, all they had to do was tell the doctor to tell Arthur “I’m sorry but our treatments are not working, with the current technology and medicine that we have your sisters prognosis is approximately 4 weeks. However if you are interested, I have a friend in the military and they have some advanced treatments that could give her more time or be more effective in treating her, if you want I could talk to them for you. I have to tell you though, I’m only saying this because I can see you are a beta tester, this isn’t an opportunity you can buy with money or influence, I don’t know how strong you are but the military is looking for exceptionally strong beta testers. You would have to prove to them that you are worth the effort and investment but if you are strong and show your value, I am positive that they will at the very least be able to give you’re sister more time.” Any military tactician would have approached it more like this, the doctor is already an insider, instead of doing stupid stuff this would have made Arthur hungry for their help, he would be scared and not trusting but with no other choice he would go them and to make sure he doesn’t lose out on the chance to save his sister he would show them more of his power. Now there’s lots of ways to tweak this to make them fall out later and become enemies, have misunderstandings or whatever if you still want conflict to happen. But to me this is would have been a much smarter approach from the military and makes a lot more sense. Still loving the story so far though!

New here and came across this book by chance.Not bad, the summary is quite eye-catching, the king actually married so much 'sickening' wives, totally awesome 😎 Burns Eternal ❤️u200d🔥Let's go!!

The story isin a complex and gritty world. The writing is detailed and insightful. I believe some parts could be clearer and easier to follow thoughThe dialogue is strong, with characters feeling realistic and unique. The way they react to the challenges around them helps the reader understand their personalities and struggles. The pacing is mostly solid, but a few scenes are dragged a LOT. And although the world-building is rich it gets a little overwhelming with all the details, makiug it hard to keep track of everything.It could be a bit more streamlined, but overall, it’s an engaging story with strong potential.

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the premise and characters are nice but the grammar and spelling mistakes are so frequent it is crazy how this ended up as the freebie today.author, this one just isn't for me because even by WN standards this is just too broken but I don't want you to think I'm just trashing it. The romance scenes were well done and i liked how you structured his awakening while still leaving some mystery. With a good editor or grammarly, I could see this book on Amazon tomorrow.

I am comfortable reading. Not too great and not too bad.

Well it's definitely the author's first work, I can tell. I do applaud you wholeheartedly for actually sticking to the story and actually following an upload schedule.Well with that out of the way, I would like to offer some suggestions. The grammar itself isn't the worst. Obviously there are mistakes here and there (mainly about punctuation and sentence structure) but that's about the average quality you can find on webnovel so I wouldn't fault you. You are writing in first person POV which is really good for a character driven writing style, but the problem is that you need to include more descriptive language into your writing to make us engaged with the story as well as adhering to 'show don't tell' thing. You see, humans have 5 senses, but you only describe what the mc sees and exclude hearing and smelling completely which otherwise could have helped in making your world feel alive (here you can also use metaphors and comparisons like many authors do). You should also include more internal monologues so that at the very least make him somewhat entertaining to read, as well as slow down the pace a bit to make actions feel natural.