Life is not just a Game

I would have rated it more had you only joined the Supreme Side, not Strongest. Strongest is overrated bruh haha! Joking! Looks good, good luck in your endeavor and may lots of readers check it out!

The world seems really well thought out but I feel like the quality of writing limits my understanding of it. Sometimes characters will say one thing then do the exact opposite and I'm left a little confused. I feel like the story could benefit from a switch in focus from description to easily understood scenes and better flow. Still really good, would recommend

"No, now what you should do is go to the far place from this country. Don't ever, ever come back here because these creatures are very strong in this country. So you have to leave and don't come back."

Xi told the half-truth to Biyu about coming early to their home. He was tensed and curious when his security told him about a man who had been following Biyu and Martha when they were shopping outside. He had worn some wired mask so that his face was not visible. Xi took his phone and checked the pics one more time to identify the person behind the mask. He had already paid some of his men to follow Biyu and he knew that he was actually ruining her privacy buy it was for the sake of her safety. When his spy Max told him about the man he just lost his temper and asked Max to catch him at once. But to his surprise that man has managed to escape from his excellently trained men.

I walk to the entrance of hell under the altar. I pick up my blades and put them away, and push the altar away to make a hole. Yes in the Temple of God there is an entrance to the Underworld. I always loved to kill demons that came out of the hole. I had a good childhood, don't you think.

Xyrus:what?! So eto naba yung sinasabe mo sa akin na sorpresa mom?!~_~may kapatid ako?!HIND KO LANG BASTA KAPATID KAMUKHA KO PA!MOM?!WHY?!MAY ANAK KA SA LABAS?!MAY IBANG LALAKI KA BUKOD KAY PAPA?!

"I will say you..." made a little pause and said,

"Is it important? I could meet him after I finish my—" "Now means now, Ishka. It seems he really wants to see you in person ASAP." just now, I could see grievance and feelings of longing in his tone and look in his eyes. Surprised I agreed, "Fine." I pressed the up button while Louise kept buzzing in the background. "Umm are you really ok, Ms Zafra?"worried, Randolph patted her shoulders to wake her up. "Heheh..... J-Just c-call me Louise or L-Liz, Rand— I mean Mr. Dela Cruz." Louise said dreamingly as the elevator doors opened.