War-Mother and the sin of gluttony

when I saw her I know I had to have her as a friend. I asked if we can hang out

Faustina began to explain.

Shr raised the bow in her right hand and drew it lightly across the strings. A long, gentle, and sorrowful sound rang out.

I need to get myself away from this place

"I'm studying to become the manager for you and Lyssa. When I complete my study I will take over for uncle Anthony" Damian said matter of factly.

I read till chapter 72, and i think i can't go further . When i started reading this , i had high hopes. The reasons were :- The pretty good writing( nothing revolutionary  but definitly better than most books out there.)- The many possibilities of developement for the plot - The fact that the transition from a cowardly character to a confident one for the Mc was well done.- Although this novel takes some elements of another( bloodline system, which is not so great either) , it slowly finds its own way.- The other voice of the system which added a layer of mystery .But that was all. And some point, as time goes by, one find himself/ herself unable to continue because some problems are too obvious to be ignored  : - The pace is horribly slow.It is not a bad thing per se . However when NOTHING substential happens to the Mc , it just makes the book boring.- What is even the Mc 's motivation?So far i don't see one.  Him not having any clear ambition makes it so he doesn't go beyond the " i'm an author's good idea " to become a " i'm an author's good idea who works because I FEEL REAL " . Harry is an Mc because the author made him so. If he was a side character in some other book , People wouldn’t even care about him , because he is not interesting.This applies to other characters as well. So far , none of them seems a little bit interesting or real.- The story doesn't progress and it feels like there are no dangers or difficulties for the Mc(A competition is approaching but there's no tension at all ). The world building isn't doing much better , as it is nothing new and we don't even know that much about the world yet.- The author's writing is also a problem.Although the grammar and the vocabulary are good( it's nothing extraordinary but it's better than most of the novels on this app), the author has a serious issue with emotions.The tension, the fear , the sadeness... it's like the author has troubles showing emotions. It is not so evident in the earlier chapters. But as one goes further , it is more and more glaring.That's why every interactions feels so inconsistent and not relatable at all.Besides , i myself do not like it when the Mc dwells on sadness and regrets. But the author could have shown at least that  Harry( even though he said the contrary) deep down, cares for his family. It should have been shown( or told ) a bit that it hurts him that they didn’t even searched for him when he moved out . What i mean is that the author could have add some complexity to the characters' emotions which would help making them appear real and human-like.Moreover, the chapters aren't that long .72 chapters appears to be a lot but it isn't ( for that book).Overall, this novel isn't bad but just average . I'm so disappointed because so much more could have been done .

I can't stop reading! Everything's cool...from the plot to the characters and all.You're doing a great job, author!

Great story really! Though I have a few major flaws to point out! First is plot development! It's too slow! Like super duper slow. Author created a very big world yet the story development is super slow! It would get boring as time goes by since nothing exciting comes up!  I dont have that much patience to keep reading about irrelevant minor stuffs.Second is MC's personality. It's Childish! I mean if author wants to make it something funnier with this Childish MC then it's not working, Annoying even.Now for the good parts of the story!First is the uniqueness of the story! You can rarely see an NPC with Ice Magic! Or his dungeon is frozen themed! Always fire, undead, darkness, the usual edgy stuff! His main weapon isnt even a sword! Plus points with that! Second Grammar! There's no noticeable flaws in the writing! One of the many flaws that authors have and never even improve on it! But this! For a first novel  you did well! Now! Although you have this good points, the flaws I listed will weigh more on why people stop reading, most people dont have that much of time to be patient.Goodluck!