VR10Beta Volume 1

F*** tell me when is the next chapter coming i can't wait tell me right nowwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww.................................

This novel is one of those where the MC gets a system not to power-up themselves but to run a business. I personally really like this kind of novels, so it's interesting to read.So far there are only 4 chapters so I guess the shop would become more and more popular overtime.A few suggestions I wanted to give based on my personal opinion (author you can ignore these if you want since they are just my opinions)Do a bit more world building, there are certain things I was able to imagine on my own but also things that I couldn't create a mental image of. One such thing is the shop: there is a transformation but the reader doesn't get to know much about how it looks now compared to before. I'd recommend checking out Black Tech Internet Cafe or some other similar novels to get inspiration on how to describe the changes.From the general writing perspective I'd suggest avoiding repetitive use of words such as realized and shabby, and look for some synonyms.The plot is a bit fast but I don't mind that too much.Overall it's a very nice novel. I hope Lin Fan's sister isn't crazy and the shop grows well. Keep working hard!

I am the Great Flame Alchemist Roy Mustang. The start of this story and the system feels weirdly similar to the Reincarnation in Another world as a slime. I love that anime btw so my review can be a bit biased.I love the fact that someone else picked up a system of this kind. It's one of the best out there and I don't understand why it's so underrated or why there aren't more stories relating to it out there. Anyway, the start is pretty good and I am ready to give it a chance.

A beautiful and interesting story, I advise you to read itOnly the writer should spell more chapters                                                                       

This novel has so much potential and I’m loving it so keep it up 👍🏼

"What do you mean?"

Dia mencengkram bajuku seolah – olah tidak ingin lepas,

Eva wanted to explore more of the system but was interrupted by a soldier who was in front of her. The soldier asked in a grump voice as if he was really tired of doing this task.