I don't know what happened to that slime creature nor do I remember how much time passed since those streams of light nor do I have the slightest idea what or who were those dots of light but when I somehow became conscious again, I found out I was in some place.
Once Reni had left, Jazmin walked towards her safe haven, the attic botanical room. Walking into the room, she automatically felt the ease and comfort that only that room can bring. Walking past the flower bed, lining the walls around the door, she goes straight for the loveseat canopy facing the high windows. She falls back on the couch, her head resting on the arm rest, she looked up at the skylight above her and sighed.
"Who the fuck dared to get on my property and slander Joohyun? He looked at his secretary and took a sharp inhale. "I want you to destroy this picture and make sure that no one ever sees this article." His secretary bowed his head and walked out of the office to handle his duties. Sehun was angry. He prayed for the man that wrote the article and captured the picture. Sehun picked up his phone and called a number. After a few rings, a female voice picked up.
At this moment Tatsuya mind darkened , his anger was so strong that he could not think anymore , it was the side-effect of using the 2nd stage of his Rage's God mode without having the necessary physical strength.
She choked up a bit as she tried to let out a calm voice with a cheerful tone, "It's alright in the end you know, I have saved you… both, now you guys would end up in heaven which where none could hurt you… A paradise is clearly better than you have right now ri-"
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may just have some rough-around-the-edges writing but characters and plot def seem interesting. only thing I'm really worried about is the update schedule - there are more days of no updates, than there are chapters (last update 19 days ago, with only 16 uploaded ch's). I'll probably keep in my library for a little while, see if author comes back with more updates - hope so bc I wanna know more about the king lol
Potential! I must say, it is exciting diving into the world. While it's not without flaws, the potential of the plot and promise on display are certainly good.Writing - Needs improvement. A lot. But it's readable, understable and sufficient. Still, if the author can improve the writing by a level or two, it will be amazing. Tip- Focus on some realistic reactions from characters, situations and such. Plot- Since there isn't much of plot given till now, I have considered it's potential. If The author plays it right, the plot can become a great piece among 'system' contents.Character - Dialogues! they make or break the characters and it is good to see, character have plenty interaction. Well done there. Just needs some refinement.World Building- Although not unique in its genre with systems, ranks, monsters, etc. I could understand the world quite a lot from the first 15 chapters. So, I would say it was done great. Well, there is more to explore in future, so I belive again in it's potential.Overall, it is a good story. Needs editing and refinements, but still enjoyable.
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