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From what we got it is a really interesting idea but the writing needs to improve, i don't mean this in a bad way for example you use the same words a lot of times like I , I said ,I thought you could next time use stuff like as i said, thinking to my self, doing so basically try and use different words. The second issue was you don't let us find stuff for ourselves for example when Cyrus's dad tanked the fire ball and said "I'm immune" it sounded dry and boring try only hint that he has those abilities aside from these issues it's really good 👍
Kinda cliche not that I dislike that. I just wish the mc wasn’t someone’s summoned creature kinda also usually when something evolves it evolves into something more powerful in that category of monsters or whatever unless influenced by something. The mc however when from a slime to and explosive slime which is ok then straight to a wraith lmao kinda a weird development idk.
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