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The story is generic, and the characters are made from cardboard. The MC also seems slow. The "Golden finger" - the System, is almost superfluous, and its exact use is blurred. The grammar is okayish, even with the few errors here and there, but all characters' names are Western. It's strange and breaks immersion to have these kinds of names in an Eastern novel.It might be worth reading for some people, but there are heaps of better stories in the same genre.
Your novel has grabbed me from the first moment, I can't wait to see more chapters and enjoy them. I hadn't read in this App for a while, but now I know what to entertain myself with.
I enjoyed the story so far. The writing style is amazing! It surely is something to look forward to. The plot and visualization of the story is really good. This story has so much potential as long as it is written consistently with a good plot and good character development along the way.Please more chapters, Author!! I want some more !!
Shaping up to be a good story. Don't let any mean comments get you down as you continue to write. Over time, everything will fall into place. My only advice is trying to not make the MC too overpowered too fast, or the side characters too mindless or uninteresting.All in all, keep up the good work 👍
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